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faruk079
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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools.
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There are two types of schools in our country such as unisexual and co-education. Nowadays, unisexual schools have become the predominant choice for education to many parents in our country.

This type of school has been becoming progressively popular in our countries for numerous reasons. At the outset, as in these schools only one gender is taught, the pupils can concentrate substantially on their studies. This is because, if they are taught with the students of opposite sex, they might be deviated from their eventual goals because of getting into affairs. Furthermore, the students can involve themselves in a wide variety of courses according to their sexual characteristics. For instance, in a girls’ school the girls can be taught about the subjects related to the home economics which is quite impossible in boys’ school. In addition, in co-education sometimes boys and girls might be embarrassed of asking any question in the class which may hamper their eventual results.

On the contrary, there are several disadvantages why sometimes this type of school is not preferred. As in this school opposite genders cannot interact with each other, it would be a problem for them to work together in their future career. As a result, they would not able to build the cross-gender relationships. Furthermore, the students get limited competitive surroundings prepared by the same gender affecting their future career.

To recapitulate, after researching the ins and outs of the unisexual schools it can be said that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Hence, this type of schools must be prioritized in the education system.
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Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello Faruk!

Unisex, not unisexual! Worse, unisex means for both genders! If you read your essay, you will see that this mistake makes parts of the essay difficult to understand.

First main paragraph - Why is home economics impossible in a boys school? Don't men cook in your country? I did home economics at school and loved it! Many top chefs are male. The last sentence is equally true for both types of school.

Second main paragraph - Why would the students NOT be able to interact with the opposite gender? They could do this outside school. Of course, particularly in Islamic countries, this is more of a religious issue than an educational one.

Overall, arguments are very general and therefore frequently either unclear or simply untrue. Language range is limited as a result.

All the best,
David
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faruk079 wrote:Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of unisexual schools.
Answer:
There are two types of schools in our country such as unisexual and co-education.(<--Reword to: "There are two types of schools in our country: single sex and co-education.") Nowadays, single sexschools have become the predominant choice for education for many parents.

This type of school has been becoming progressively popular for numerous reasons. At the outset, in these schools where only one gender is taught, the pupils can concentrate substantially on their studies. This is because, if they are taught with students of the opposite sex, they might be distracted from their eventual goals. Furthermore, the students can involve themselves in a wide variety of courses according to their sexual characteristics. For instance, in a girls’ school the girls can be taught about subjects related to home economics which is quite impossible in a boys’ school. In addition, in co-education sometimes boys and girls might be embarrassed of asking questions, which may hamper their eventual results.

On the contrary, there are several disadvantages to this type of school. For example, opposite genders cannot interact with each other, which may cause problems when working together in thefuture. As a result, they would not able to build cross-gender relationships. Furthermore, the students get limited competitive surroundings prepared by the same gender affecting their future career.(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

To recapitulate, after researching the ins and outs of single sex schools it can be said that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Hence, this type of school must be prioritized in the education system.
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