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Task 2 Academic - Feedback Please - Pursuing an 8

Posted: Thu May 21, 2015 11:52 am
by feljabu
mmm

Re: Task 2 Academic - Feedback Please - Pursuing an 8

Posted: Mon May 25, 2015 1:41 am
by irma
In2nd sentence due to not due of... end of intro para should have a sentence... I will discuss both sides before a conclusion is drawn

Re: Task 2 Academic - Feedback Please - Pursuing an 8

Posted: Mon May 25, 2015 1:46 am
by irma
In 2nd para,instead of writing in the suburb i live. Write your town name if you want band 8... also dont write thanks to the easy etc... instead write jusg because of its eady accessibility

Re: Task 2 Academic - Feedback Please - Pursuing an 8

Posted: Mon May 25, 2015 1:53 am
by irma
Due is mostly use with due to
in conclusion.after themselves give full stop. And start with its therefore hoped that government would give and continue your sentence..
use would not should. Just suggest

U wrote a really good essay in 3rd para if u can try to write sentence with operations n maintainance instead of operate n maintain. Will add to impression

Re: Task 2 Academic - Feedback Please - Pursuing an 8

Posted: Mon May 25, 2015 12:21 pm
by liralis
Also...there are two sentences in which there is mistake like:

Providing free access to museums and art galleries give(S) to society...