Please review and give your opinion about task 2 GT

[Eternal_SSS]

Question: Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviors.Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

In recent years it has become obvious that visiting another country is an issue that many people feel strongly about. Many argue that visitors should imitate local behaviours and traditions while others disagree.

Some groups of people support the view point that guests have to respect and obey local rules and limitations, due to some reasons. First of all, every culture is unique and should be protected. Therefore, large number of people can extreamely change it without any chance for reverse action. Secondly, there are could be some rules, which are neccessary for safety, or security. For instance, there is a rule to keep clear of traffic special "Tsunami route", in Phuket.

On the other hand, some people oppose this view. In their opinion, hosting country should accept differencies in culture owing to some reasons. Firstly, visitors are usually tourists. Thus, tourizm is a good incoe for economy of hosting country. For example, Thailand, Turkey, and Italy have huge profit fro tourists. Secondly, moving to another country is usually hard and stressful. So, local people should understand foreigners and help them.

In conclusion, I believe that every nation should keep culture of ancestors as much clear as it is possible. But, they also have to teach and assist to visitors, be kind and patient with them.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

The first main paragraph is unclear, especially the example of the road. Rules that are clearly intended for safety reasons do not really come into this argument, as they are not 'culture'.

The second main paragraph is reasonable, but should money come before culture?

Overall, the essay introduces one good point, but doesn't develop it. Vocabulary and grammar are quite good.

All the best,
David

[Eternal_SSS]

Thank you very much for Your help, David.