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yhjsaber
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Can anyone grade this for me? (GT)

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t has been suggested that people who live in big cities tend to lead an unhealthy life. As it has become evident that an increasing number of people living in urban areas suffer from health problems such as diabetes and heart disease, I tend to agree with this view and believe that this alarming trend has come about for two reasons.

The first and foremost reason for this trend may involve the increasingly high rate of population increase in most big cities. With more people striving to secure a place for earning a living, the competition among city dwellers is likely to become more intensified. As a result, those who wish to survive or even thrive in this competitive environment would have to struggle to learn or to work for longer hours every day in order for them to remain competent. This can lead to a sedentary lifestyle, which substantially diminishes the time for a hard working city resident to relax and to have physical training, thereby increasing the possibility of them having health problems such as eye irritation and pain in the back.

The prevalence of unhealthy fast food is the second main reason why the general population health level in many big cities has been deteriorating. The high salt and fat content in these types of food has the potential to increase the blood pressure if a person eats it on a daily basis. Unfortunately, it is commonly seen that for the purpose of time saving, many city residents are forced to eat regularly in restaurant where fast food are commonly served. The lack of exercise and constant intake of excessive amount of fat and salt have resulted in the high possibility of people having food related diseases such as obesity, diabetes or even heart attack.

In conclusion, the unhealthy lifestyle derived from intense population growth and the prevalence of unhealthy fast food are two factors contributing to the decreasing health level in big cities. If proper measures level were not taken, people would likely to suffer more from living in big cities.
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