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naveed.ahmed
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Task 2 - First attempt, please review.

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More and more children are eating junk and fast food. Why is this happening? What are the effect of this phenomenon? What can parents do to avoid possible harmful outcome of this?

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In recent times the life has become very fast paced and people do not have time to prepare healthy meals. This is nowhere evident than seeing young kids eating junk food more and more. It is believed that today’s lifestyle is the main cause of this phenomenon, and leading to unhealthy lifestyle. These arguments will be analyzed prior to coming to a reasoned conclusion.
Due to very strict routine these days, most parents are unable to prepare food for their kids. For example both parents have to attend the office from morning till evening and they prefer to give money to their kids to buy a burger or pizza, instead of cooking food for them. This example clearly shows that why this trend is increasing. From this it can be concluded that laziness of parents is a major cause of this behavior.
However, this is effecting children health. For instance a recent studies show that one of the main causes of obesity is bad habits of eating. It goes without saying that eating fast food is leading to high cholesterol and related diseases. Thus there is an obvious link between eating habits and having a healthy life.
It is felt by many that this problem can be overcome by educating children about the effect of eating junk food. Moreover parents should prepare their food and encourage them to eat healthy food. It is hard to see how anyone can support the idea of eating junk food after analyzing these point of views. Without a doubt, elders need to help youngers to adopt a healthy lifestyle.
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naveed.ahmed wrote:More and more children are eating junk and fast food. Why is this happening? What are the effect of this phenomenon? What can parents do to avoid possible harmful outcome of this?

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In recent times life has become very fast paced and people do not have time to prepare healthy meals. This is nowhere evident than seeing young kids eating junk food more and more.(<--Reword to: "This is most evident in young people's diets.") It is believed that today’s lifestyle is the main cause of this phenomenon, which has led to unhealthy lifestyles. These arguments will be analyzed prior to coming to a reasoned conclusion.

Due to very busy schedules, most parents are unable to prepare food for their kids. For example, both parents have to work from morning till evening and they prefer to give money to their kids to buy a burger or pizza, instead of cooking food for them. This example clearly shows why this unhealthy trend is increasing. From this it can be concluded that laziness of parents is a major cause of this behavior.

However, this is effecting children's health. A recent study shows that one of the main causes of obesity is bad eating habits. It goes without saying that eating fast food leads to high cholesterol and related diseases. Thus there is an obvious link between eating habits and having a healthy life.

It is felt by many that this problem can be overcome by educating children about the effects of eating junk food. Moreover parents should prepare meals and encourage their children to eat healthy food. It is hard to see how anyone can support the idea of eating junk food after analyzing these points of view. Without a doubt, elders need to help youngers to adopt a healthy lifestyle.
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