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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Today child rearing has been seen in different forms. This is influenced by cultures and trends around the world, which spawns a debate over which type of guidance a child should have. On the one hand, many believe that strict rules of behaviour should be implemented in the household, on the other, some argue that giving children freedom to do whatever they want is more beneficial. Both sides will be analyzed prior to reaching a reasoned conclusion.

Traditionally, numerous members of the population hold the idea of having a rigid structure with regards to children's behaviour as an accepted reality. Take Singapore for instance, children in this part of the world have strict schedule on their respective activities for the day. Having this plan helps them to be more efficient in doing their tasks such as schoolworks, researches, extracurricular activities, homeworks and even chores. This fact makes it clear that a thight supervision can be considered a significant way to attend a child. Thus, this thought is difficult to undermine.

However, some prefer freedom over rules to govern the young minds, as they explore their environment on their own terms. To illustrate this, in the United States, a typical family allows their child to be emancipated from their grasps as early as a child learns how to walk. They do this to enable the child to adapt and be independently aware of his or her own surroundings. As simple as discovering the way to the bathroom and knowing which place is dangerous or not would help the child to grow with experiences that can serve him or her well in the future. The effects of which could later be seen in the child's development. In his or her first day of school, for example, the child could use the autonomy gained during his or her early years to overcome the fear of separation. This certainly shows that freedom for children is a recommended way of guidance. Hence, it is easy to understand why this impression has gained the appeal of others.

After analyzing these points of view, it is hard not to side with the premise that freedom should be imparted to children in order for them to achieve their full potentials and engage the world independently. Therefore, it is hoped that this will continue to be practiced in the foreseeable future.
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Re: Please critique my essay.. Thanks :-)

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acer05 wrote:In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Today, child rearing can be seen in different forms. This is influenced by cultures and trends around the world, which has spawned a debate over which type of guidance a child should have. On the one hand, many believe that strict rules of behaviour should be implemented in the household. On the other, some argue that giving children freedom to do whatever they want is more beneficial. Both sides will be analyzed prior to reaching a reasoned conclusion.

Traditionally, numerous members of the population believe that having a rigid structure with regards to children's behaviour is an accepted reality. Take Singapore, for instance. Children in this part of the world have strict schedules on their respective activities for the day. Having this plan helps them to be more efficient in doing their tasks such as schoolwork, research, extracurricular activities, homework and even chores. This fact makes it clear that tight supervision can be considered a significant way to attend a child. Thus, this thought is difficult to undermine.

However, some prefer freedom over rules to govern young minds as they explore their environment on their own terms. To illustrate this, in the United States a typical family allows their child to be emancipated from their grasp as early as the child learning how to walk. They do this to enable the child to adapt and be independently aware of his or her own surroundings. As simple as discovering the way to the bathroom and knowing which place is dangerous or not helps the child to grow with experiences that can serve him or her well in the future. The effects of which can later be seen in the child's development. In his or her first day of school, for example, the child could use the autonomy gained during his or her early years to overcome the fear of separation. This certainly shows that freedom for children is a recommended way of guidance. Hence, it is easy to understand why this impression has gained the appeal of others.

After analyzing these points of view, it is hard not to side with the premise that freedom should be imparted to children in order for them to achieve their full potential and engage the world independently. Therefore, it is hoped that this will continue to be practiced in the foreseeable future.
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