Writing task 1 - Table

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gkm90
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Writing task 1 - Table

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Topic --
The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families
living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
and make comparisons where relevant.

Family type Proportion of people from each
household type living in poverty
single aged person 6% (54,000)
aged couple 4% (48,000)
single, no children 19% (359,000)
couple, no children 7% (211,000)
sole parent 21% (232,000)
couple with children 12% (933,000)
all households 11% (1,837,000)

The table shows the amount of people that lives in poverty distinct by family types in Australia in 1999.

As we can see, there is a grand total of 1,837,000 people living in poverty which represent 11% of all Australian population. Split in family types, it shows that aged single or couple and also couple with no children have one of the lowest rate of poverty, respectively 6%, 4% and 7%. In addition, the highest percentage of poverty concentrate in sole parents and single without children families, respectively 19% and 21%, having a percentage over the average.

Another point to be analysed are the couple with children families, although the 12% represents the higher number among all family types, the percentage remains in the average of the total. The reason it happens is because this is the most common family structure in Australia.

In conclusion the high poverty percentage in Australia concentrate in families with sole parents and single without children and the lowest percentage in the aged families.
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gkm90 wrote:
Topic --
The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families
living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
and make comparisons where relevant.

Family type Proportion of people from each
household type living in poverty
single aged person 6% (54,000)
aged couple 4% (48,000)
single, no children 19% (359,000)
couple, no children 7% (211,000)
sole parent 21% (232,000)
couple with children 12% (933,000)
all households 11% (1,837,000)

The table shows the amount of people that were living in poverty, separated by family type, in Australia in 1999.

As we can see, there was a total of 1,837,000 people living in poverty, which represents 11% of the total Australian population. Split byfamily type, it shows that aged single, aged couple and also couple with no children have the lowest rates of poverty, respectively 6%, 4% and 7%. In contrast, the highest percentage of poverty occurs in sole parent and single without children families, respectively 19% and 21%, having a percentage over the average.(<-- What is the average?)

Another point to note is that, although the rate for] couples with children, 12%, is the third highest percentage among all family types, this amount remains in the average of the total. The reason for this is because this is the most common family structure in Australia.

In conclusion, the highest poverty rates in Australia are suffered by families with sole parents and singles without children while the lowest percentage is experienced in the aged families.
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