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aprodigy
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Topic: What are reasons for crime recommitment? what are soultion for it?
It is true that crime recommitment is on the increase in our society. From my point of view, this trend caused by some reasons should be concerned to tackle them.
To begin with, it is undeniable that there are several reasons resulting in the recommitment of criminals. One reason is that unemployment is increasing more and more in every corner in the world. It is clear that many prisoners find difficult in earning a job to make end meet after returning to their home. As a result, they might rob or steal something from others to survive. Another justification is that criminals are lack of education after released from prisons. It is worth noting that they do not want to have any moral lesson at schools for social bias. Because of inadequate knowledge, it is easier for them to make the similar mistakes as they did in the past. For example, if a robber could not understand the negative effects of his actions, he still would repeat these mistakes in another time.
In order to tackle with this problem, appropriate solutions should be taken into consideration immediately. It is necessary for government to create more job opportunities for someone who has just exited prisons. This might help them to bring a large number benefits in their life in terms of finance and health. Furthermore, education programs should be expanded for everyone, especially such criminals so that they can distinguish between the wrong and the right thing in the life.
In conclusion, it is clear that various reasons cause this problem and steps need to be taken to solve this of many prisoners returning to crime again.
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aprodigy wrote:Topic: What are reasons for crime recommitment? what are soultion for it?
It is true that crime recommitment is on the increase in our society. From my point of view, this trend is caused by several reasons that should be considered in order to find a solution.
To begin with, it is undeniable that there are several reasons resulting in the recommitment of criminals. One reason is that unemployment is increasing in every corner of the world. It is clear that many prisoners have difficulty finding a job to make ends meet after returning home. As a result, they might rob or steal from others to survive. Another justification is that criminals lack education after being released from prison. It is worth noting that they do not want to have any moral lessons. Because of inadequate knowledge, it is easier for them to make the same mistakes as they did in the past. For example, if a robber could not understand the negative effects of his actions, he would repeat these mistakes again and again.
In order to tackle this problem, appropriate solutions should be taken into consideration immediately. It is necessary for the government to create more job opportunities for someone who has just exited prison. This might help them to bring a large number benefits into their life in terms of finance and health. Furthermore, education programs should be expanded for everyone, especially criminals so that they can distinguish between the wrong and the right things in the life.
In conclusion, it is clear that various reasons cause this problem and steps need to be taken to solve the problem of many prisoners returning to crime again.
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