Writing Task 2

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charlie
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Writing Task 2

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TITLE.......Education,is it for individuals to be useful in society or it is for the individuals personal ambitions?


Academic pursuits may appear to some to be for the individual,s sole benefit.However,such endeavors are also of communal benefit as this essay shall discuss below.

An educated person may use their acquired knowledge for the benefit of their society.To illustrate ,one may graduate with Community Nursing qualifications and return to use their skills to nurse the infirm in their community thus improving home based care.

Some individuals acquire specialist education abroad for their professions and serve in their home areas.To give an example,most developing countries send expatriate medical students to be schooled in fields such as neurosurgery in Europe.After graduating they return to practice in their home countries thus saving locals a lot of money.

On the other hand,education has personal benefits to the individual.One gets to pursue an area of keen interest and obtain an in depth scientific understanding.To bring this into perspective,a peasant farmer who pursues a course in ranching enhances his trade.

Admittedly,most schooled people get to be employed and secure a steady income for their livelihood.Professionals such as teachers are often guaranteed a living wage for their sustenance and that of their families.

Furthermore,scholastic achievements promote self esteem and bring about self actualization in individuals.This is more apparent when one pursues further studies than their professional peers.To provide a classic example,a Registered General nurse who studies further into Opthalmology rightfully feels a professional edge.

In sum,the writer is of the opinion that education has dual and mutual benefit to individuals and their communities.
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Re: Writing Task 2

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charlie wrote: Academic pursuits may appear to some to be for the individual's sole benefit. However, such endeavors are also of communal benefit as this essay shall discuss below.

An educated person may use their acquired knowledge for the benefit of their society. To illustrate, one may graduate with Community Nursing qualifications and return to use their skills to nurse the infirm in their community, thus improving home based care.

Some individuals acquire specialist education abroad for their chosen profession and serve in their home areas.To give an example, most developing countries send expatriate medical students to be schooled in fields such as neurosurgery in Europe. After graduating, they return to practice in their home countries, thus saving locals a lot of money. (<-- you could include an explanation of how this saves money. For example, thus saving the locals a lot of money because they won't have to travel long distances to receive medical care.

On the other hand, education has personal benefits to the individual. One gets to pursue an area of keen interest and obtain an in-depth scientific understanding. To put this in perspective, a peasant farmer who pursues a course in ranching enhances his trade. (<-- You could be more specific here. For example, a peasant farmer who pursues a course in ranching improves his ability to farm, thus increasing his profits.

Admittedly, most schooled people become employed and secure a steady income for their livelihood. Professionals such as teachers are often guaranteed a living wage for their sustenance and that of their families.

Furthermore, scholastic achievements promote self esteem and bring about self actualization in individuals. This is more apparent when one pursues further studies than their professional peers. To provide a classic example, a Registered General Nurse who studies further in Opthalmology rightfully feels a professional edge.

In summary, the writer is of the opinion that education has dual and mutual benefit to both individuals and their communities.
Hi Charlie,

This is a great essay. Your arguments are clear and easy to understand. You make good use of examples.
Don't forget, there is always a space after a comma or full-stop.
Keep up the good work!

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charlie
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Re: Writing Task 2

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what band score can that essay fetch?
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