The bar graph of T1

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Shokir
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The bar graph of T1

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The provided bar chart reveals information about how much money for several consumer goods were spent in European countries like Germany, Italy, France and Britain. What stands out from the graph is that Britain was the most prominent country at paying all goods.
Starting from Germany and France, who spent equally 150000 pounds for personal stereos, they spent almost the same amount for perfumes. However, France surpassed Cds purchase spending by 15000 pounds more and spending around 160000 pounds. But France paid 5000 pounds less money than Germany for tennis racquets which meant France paid 145000 pounds. Vice versa can be seen at both toys’ and photographic film rates where Germany paid 10000 and 20000 pounds less money than France whose pay was 155000 and 165000 pounds sterling respectively.
As about Italians, who spent equally 155000 pounds for both toys and photographic film, they used 150000 pounds for each of the rest goods.
Turning to British purchase rate, it increased from personal stereos to photographic film. The rise was as follows: 150000 pounds for personal stereos and tennis racquets; 160000 pounds for perfumes; just over 160000 pounds Cds approximately 170000 pounds for toys and photographic film.
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David.IELTS.Examiner
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Re: The bar graph of T1

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

The big problems here are with grammar and phrasing.

'France paid ...' No, it didn't! People in France spent ...

Most of the data is simply listed, not compared, especially at the end.

'Vice versa' and 'paying all goods' are incorrect phrases.

Overall, average, but at least you have included the key points.

All the best,
David
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