Writting Task 1 Academic

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minhtrum
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Writting Task 1 Academic

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The graphs provides data on the proportions of exports from Papua New Guinea in 1982 and 1991. In general, most suffered a decrease in their share of the export market, except gold and palm oil.

In 1982, gold and palm oil exports accounted for 31.9% and 4.0% respectively. However, after 9 years, while gold exports witness a sharp rise in their market share with a surge to 52%, palm oil stood at its intial figure.

In contrast, the proportion of the other goods all dropped. Coffee experienced the most drammatic fall, with 14.4% in 1982 and latter going down to 3.7% in 1991. Copper exports similarly plunged with a decrease of 6.6% whereas the proportions of coffee, tea and copra in 1991 were less than half of them in 1982. Copra oil, cocoa and others exports slided unconsiderable in their maket share, all with a downward trend of less than 3%.

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minhtrum wrote:The graphs provide data on the proportion of exports from Papua New Guinea in 1982 and 1991. In general, most suffered a decrease in their share of the export market, except for gold and palm oil.

In 1982, gold and palm oil exports accounted for 31.9% and 4.0% respectively. However, after 9 years, while gold exports saw a sharp rise in their market share with a surge to 52%, palm oil remained at its initial figure.

In contrast, the proportion of the other goods all dropped. Coffee experienced the most drammatic fall, with 14.4% in 1982 and later decreasing to 3.7% in 1991. Copper exports similarly plunged with a decrease of 6.6% whereas the proportions of coffee, tea and copra in 1991 were less than half of what they were in 1982. Copra oil, cocoa and others exports decreased slightly in their maket share, all with a downward trend of less than 3%.

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Good job. Very clear and easy to understand. A conclusion to summarize all the information would be a good way to finish. For example, 'In conclusion, by 1991 the majority of Papua New Guinea's exports were gold and palm oil, to the detriment of coffee, copper, tea and copra.'
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