Need feedbacks to improve speaking bandscore!

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paperheart
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Need feedbacks to improve speaking bandscore!

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Been practising for few times and still having few pauses to find the right words to say!


Talk about a friend that you had. Describe him/her and say

- How did you meet?
- What did you do together?
- What do you think about this friendship now?


Thank you!
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Re: Need feedbacks to improve speaking bandscore!

Post by lmoore »

Hi, Paperheart,
Thank you for sharing about your friendship with your friend!
You provided some good examples that help the listener to better understand your friendship. Using linking phrases and transitions, such as, “for example” is always a good idea. Nice work there.
You’re right that your pauses to find the right words slow you down quite a bit. However, you usually end up finding the right words, which is more than half the battle. You’re easy to understand, and your speaking speed will come with time and practice.
I would encourage you to inject some emotion into your speaking as it will help liven up your speech. You sound very nervous and/or serious. If you are more confident in yourself and your abilities, your speed will increase, and you will sound as though you are having a somewhat better time that you did in this speech.
Your use of vocabulary is quite good, but it can be a bit too formal. For example, when you said, “allocated” about your friend having to sit next to you in school, you could have said, “Our teacher assigned her to sit next to me.”
There were a couple of verb problems as well:
- venture into the music scene as soon as we finish high school. – This occurred in the past tense, so you should have said “as soon as we finished high school.”
- The similarities of hobbies we has shared has managed to keep our friendship stronger . . . – This should have been, “The similarities in hobbies we HAVE shared made our friendship stronger.” Use “have” here because “similarities” is plural.
- We spent a lot of time on outdoor activities because we consider ourselves as adventurous people. . .-“We spent a lot of time DOING outdoor activities because we consider ourselves TO BE adventurous people.”
Best wishes as you practice!
paperheart
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Re: Need feedbacks to improve speaking bandscore!

Post by paperheart »

Again, thanks Immore!
:)
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