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an academic IELTS task 1. would very appreciate your assessment

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WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Answer:

The given diagrams describe the structure of an electricity generator powered by wave energy, as well as two different installation site options.

The generator is composed of two chambers overlying each other, and connected by two openings. The lower chamber has a wide side opening that is positioned opposite the wave direction, through which water enters the chamber. As the wave flows into the chamber the water level rises and causes the air in the upper part of the chamber to shift into the upper chamber through one connecting opening. Meanwhile, the upper chamber contains a vertical turbine through which the air shifted from the lower chamber flows, and generates a rotational movement. The shifted air is then discharged to the outside through a wide hole on top of the chamber. Air is sucked back in through a porous opening on top and then into the lower chamber through the other connecting opening when water level drops. The rotational movement of the turbine is used for electricity generation by a generator to which the turbine is connected.

Regarding the possible sites for installation of the machine, there are two options, each has its advantages and disadvanatages. The machine can be installed at large waves area at a deeper part of the sea, where the electricity output would be high, while the disadvanage would be the high cost. Otherwise, it could be fixed near the shore at small waves zone, at a lower cost. A lower output would then be expected.
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Re: an academic IELTS task 1. would very appreciate your assessment

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Hello!

This is very good, but you must have some kind of summary. I suggest putting this with the introduction in the case of such diagrams.

This report contains a great range of vocabulary and grammar with plenty of less common vocab items. The only changes I would make are deleting 'each has its advantages and disadvantages' and changing 'at a deeper part' to 'in a deeper part'.

Well done!

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Re: an academic IELTS task 1. would very appreciate your assessment

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thank you very much.. I really appreciate your comment
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