Kindely, evaluate my GT writing - task 2

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ysaddiq
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Kindely, evaluate my GT writing - task 2

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Today more people are overweight than ever before.

What in your opinion are the primary causes of this?
What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?


Nowadays, a lot of people are following unhealthy diet habits that leads to overweight. Today we have more overweight individuals than ever before. In this essay we will discuss causes of this problem and what measures governments and individuals have to take to overcome this epidemic.

first of all, the two main causes of the overweight issue are the lack of the basic knowledge of nutrition and low active lifestyle that most of us live in. our primary schools do not educate effectively young children about the basics of nutrition and how it is crucial to a healthy and balanced lifestyle. For instance, 90% of our national schools includes shops which serve processed and full of sugar snacks. As the students have no enough knowledge about the bad effects of these snacks they feel no guilty buying it. Moreover inactive lifestyle leads into obesity and very bad health consequences. for example, using cars and effortless transportations for all of our trips leads into huge amount of unburned calories which automatically our body converts them into fat.

on the other hand, government and private sectors should work together to overcome this epidemic. firstly government should heavily include nutrition and fitness into primary school curriculum. as a consequence students from young ages will have more deeper knowledge about food and the effect of an active lifestyle. on the other side, private sectors should open varieties of healthy restaurants which serves real and tasty healthy foods only. as a result, people will have other choices beside the fast food restaurants which is the main cause of obesity.

in conclusion, knowledge is crucial to overcome the obesity in our society.
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