Academic WT1 - Expected band = 7+

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jesus
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Academic WT1 - Expected band = 7+

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The charts illustrate the population of people, segregated in different ages, in Yemen and Italy in 2000, and their estimated figures for 2050. Despite having slightly lower population to children, the majority of citizens in both countries are who aged 15 to 59 years old.

According to the first diagram, Yemen people between 15 to 59 years old represent the considerable rise in population, being 57.3% in 2050 from 46.3% in 2000. Hardly any percentage of people above sixty is recorded in the period of fifty years. While young people of Yemen below fourteen accounted for the half of the total population in 2000, the figure will be dropped significantly, at the rate of 13.1%, when it reaches 2050.

Looking at the second diagram, one-third of the population of Italy were 15 to 59 year old people in 2000, this figure will decline sharply, at 46.2%, in 2050. Youths up to fourteen represent a much smaller percentage of population. Between 2000 and 2050, Only 24.1% of sixty and older Italians were recorded earlier, and it is expected to be the second highest population in later year.

Overall, it is assumed that Italy will have less population than Yemen in future.

Words = 200

Do you have any idea how can i stay around 150 words ??
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biljorojit
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Re: Academic WT1 - Expected band = 7+

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I think it is not a problem to come up to 200 . In Ielts academic writing task one we need to write minimum 150.They didn't mention any maximum limit
jesus
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biljorojit wrote:I think it is not a problem to come up to 200 . In Ielts academic writing task one we need to write minimum 150.They didn't mention any maximum limit
yes i agree. Unfortunately, more words would constitute more errors.
asadurk
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Can anyone evaluate my response of the same task.


The provided bi-charts show the ratio of different age groups' population of two mentioned countries in 2000 and predicts for 2050.

In 2000, 96.4% people's age of Yemen are less than 60, among which about 50% are between 0 to 14 years and others lie between 15 and 59. Only 3.6% people are above 60 in 2010 and will be 5.7% in 2050. Overall the ratio (about 94%) decline slightly of the age group less than 60 but the ratio of under 15 age decline about 13% while the ratio of last age group show increment of exactly 11%.

In Italy, about 3% decrement (14.3% to 11.5%) is shown in the predicted chart of the under 15 age. Similarly, declining pattern can be found in the age group of 15 to 59 from 61.6% to 46.2%. However, there is dramatic increment (24.1% to 42.3%) in the last age group found that is about 18%.
jesus
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Re: Academic WT1 - Expected band = 7+

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asadurk wrote:Can anyone evaluate my response of the same task.


The provided bi-charts show the ratio of different age groups' population of two mentioned countries in 2000 and predicts for 2050.

In 2000, 96.4% people's age of Yemen are less than 60, among which about 50% are between 0 to 14 years and others lie between 15 and 59. Only 3.6% people are above 60 in 2010 and will be 5.7% in 2050. Overall the ratio (about 94%) decline slightly of the age group less than 60 but the ratio of under 15 age decline about 13% while the ratio of last age group show increment of exactly 11%.

In Italy, about 3% decrement (14.3% to 11.5%) is shown in the predicted chart of the under 15 age. Similarly, declining pattern can be found in the age group of 15 to 59 from 61.6% to 46.2%. However, there is dramatic increment (24.1% to 42.3%) in the last age group found that is about 18%.
Because your essay contains too much numerical information, i reckon it is sounding robotic.
asadurk
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Post by asadurk »

What about this script:

The provided pie-charts show the ratio of different age groups' population of two mentioned countries in 2000 and predicts for 2050.

In 2000, Yemen population was almost contains 50% people of the age of between 0 and 14, while on same time, Italy had 14.3% people of the same age group. On the other hand, about 61% population of Italy had people of age between 15 and 59; on the same spot, 46.3% Yemeni’s lies in same age group. About 24% Italians were above 60, while Yemen’s citizens were about 50.1.

In 2050, the predicted population of Yemen and Italy of the age group of 0 to 14 years will be 37% and 11.5% respectively. Yemen will have more people between 15-59 Years then Italy that will be 57.3% and 46.2% respectively. The elder people more than 60 years of age will be 42.3% in Italy and 5.7% in Yemen.
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Post by DcalmdownD »

The pie charts show percentages of different age groups in Yemen and Italy in 2000, as well as predictions for 2050.

A brief survey of the charts reveals that Yemen had a younger society than Italy, and will remain so in 2050. In 2000, people below the age of 14 accounted for over half the population in Yemen, whereas only 14.3% of Italian people were of that age group. Although by 2050 the percentage points of those below 14 in both countries will drop, society of Yemen will still have a larger proportion of younger people (37%), while Italy will only have 11.5%. In 2000, only 3.6% of people in Yemen were over 60 years old, and that figure will grow slightly up to 5.7% in 2050. By contrast, older Italian people took up a much larger part, 24.7%, of the population, and in 2050 the number will double.

Despite the differences, both countries had and will still possess a similar pattern. People between 15 and 59 were the main body of society in both Yemen and Italy and will continue to be in 2050, for that age group accounted for more or less half of the populations of Yemen and Italy, and the figures will still be in 2050.
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