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[yasominight]

Living with animals such as owning a pet dog, cats or birds is good for people. Do you agree or disagree use personal examples to illustrate your response.


In the old days, owning an animal was restricted only for farmer and their farm animals. Nowadays, owning an animal became very popular and you can feel it very normal to see these pets with their owners everywhere in streets, markets, and even in transportation. From my point of view, having one of these pets in your house has some benefits and worth the time or efforts you spending with. The great impact for having such animal in the home can be greatly noted in the general behavior and the emotion side.
Some persons when they grow up taking care of a pet, they start to have special contacts or relations with them and they became emotionally connected. I remember once when I was traveling to Tokyo, a young 20s girl who was traveling to same destination and she asked for permission for her rabbit to be with her in the passengers’ cabinet. She explained that her rabbit give her a special kind of support that helping her overcome problem related being at high distances and closed area. She was not lying, show showed her doctor recommendation and during the whole journey she really was very calm and quiet. Her pet successfully give her the support she need to overcome her problem.
Moreover, a study that was published in medical magazine related to kids behavior, showed that raising a puppy or kitten among your kids has a great effect on their behavior. According to the study, kids looking after their pets and playing with them, are less violent than others who don’t. Apparently, these kids we instructed to deal carefully and kindly with their pets which reflect on their general behavior with other kids. This clearly shows the great effect of these pets on their owner.
Finally, I strongly support the idea of having suitable pets in the houses. Existence of such animals will greatly affect your life and specially your kids emotional and educational sides. I recommend all the parents to ask their kids what pet they may interest in, unless they have a medical reason not to have one.

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[Flick]

Living with animals such as owning a pet dog, cats or birds is good for people. Do you agree or disagree use personal examples to illustrate your response.


In the old days, owning an animal was restricted to farmers and their farm animals. Nowadays, owning an animal is very popular and it is normal to see these pets with their owners everywhere in streets, markets, and even in transportation. From my point of view, having one of these pets in your house has some benefits and is worth the time and effort. The great impact for having such an animal in the home can be greatly noted in general behavior and emotion.

Some people grow up taking care of a pet, and they have special contacts or relations with them and become emotionally connected. I remember once when I was traveling to Tokyo, a young woman in her twenties, who was traveling to same destination, asked for permission for her rabbit to be with her in the passengers’ cabin. She explained that her rabbit give her a special kind of support that helped her overcome problems related to flying and being in enclosed spaces. She was not lying, show showed her doctor's recommendation and during the whole journey she was very calm and quiet. Her pet successfully gave her the support she needed to overcome her problem.

Moreover, a study that was published in a medical magazine related to kids behavior, showed that raising a puppy or kitten with your kids has a great effect on their behavior. According to the study, kids who look after pets and play with them are less violent than kids who don’t. Apparently, these kids learn to deal carefully and kindly with their pets, which reflects on their general behavior with other kids. This clearly shows the great effect of these pets on their owners.

Finally, I strongly support the idea of having suitable pets in the home. The existence of such animals will greatly affect your life and especially your kids' emotional and educational sides. I recommend all the parents ask their kids what pet they may be interested in, unless they have a medical reason not to have one.