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Keth
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Feeedback for task 2 essay

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Hi ,

Iam Keth from Melbourne, preparing for IELTS, i need to score band 7.

Request to provide your valuable feedback for my Task 2 Essay,

Topic:
Disruptive School students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevanr examples from your experience

Essay:

There is no doubt that there are disruptive students in each and every class of a school. Good students might get distracted with the behavior of these students. Despite this,it is disagreed that disruptive students should be grouped and taught separately.This can be proven by discussing both students career and teacher's role in a school.

Firstly, few students in each class would be disobedient and noisy, this nature of the students might be due to the influence with grown up environment and people they spend time with. For Example: Students whoa re coming from slums might not have proper discipline, as they grow up in very rough conditions .separating them from other students will demotivate and will not give a chance to change their behavior. This will consequently impact the career of the student. Unless they are taught with good educational values and compare them with other students , they will not be able to realize the drawbacks of having disruptive behavior and how it will impact their career.

Secondly, teachers playing main role in shaping up children's career, mischievous students should be dealt properly to put them in right track. For Example: For children who are noisy in class, as a remedy teachers should make these students more interactive in the class and make them involve in several activities in the class. which will keep these away from their mischievous behavior. In the early stages of students life , it is easy to change the students bad behavior with proper guidance from teacher's and having education along with other students will make them realize to change their behavior .Thus, Students with disruptive behavior should not be separated from class.

Finally, Understanding the benefits of shaping up career's and proper guidance of teacher's may change the behavior .Hence these students should not be separated with other students in the class.Hope all schools will follow this principle and treat all students equally.
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