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Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Posted: Thu Mar 03, 2016 6:50 pm
by ankushcoolz
plz check this writing.......give band scores out of 9...i will be highly obliged if somebody could reply as soon as possible ....

Topic:Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.

What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Answer:: It is indeed a fact that with the advent of falsehood era, crime is increasing drastically linked to imbalance in the society.But,it has become a moot-concern that why this is and there could be some remedies. So, here I am going to scrutinize causes and solutions of this statement in this piece of writing.

As a matter of fact , first and foremost is the unemployment due to rise in population because number of the applicants are more but job vacancies are minimum.Even,over use of technology has replace man-work.Therefore,to fulfil basic needs ,young ones commit crime. For example, statistics reveal that snatching, mugging and so many other crimes are at peak in metro cities which are committed by the either juveniles or youngsters. In addition, both parents in metropolitans are bread-winners because of which it is hard to spend quality time with children as they have hectic schedule and so many daily chores to do.Hence, their offspring get deprived of parents’ guidance and moral values, which lead them to be in the bad society along with getting into malpractices. For instance, brats of rich families are often seen in such problems, quarrles and fights with their peers.

To address this problem, firstly, government must establish small-scale industries in villages, town and large scale in cities so that more and more jobs can be attained by the warm bloods of any country. Secondly, parents must spend some valuable time and understand the needs as well as problems of their children, which may bring them to be on the right path. Such as sitting for some particular time with children by having food, going out, enjoying altogether in weekends.

To conclude, after considering all the above points, I personally believe that mutual efforts of parents, law-makers and individuals need to be put for eradicating this problem from the society.

Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Posted: Wed May 25, 2016 12:17 pm
by Weekend
Hiren wrote:could you please help in how to format this essay?

Some say that it is more important for employers to consider academic qualifications rather than personal life experience and values when hiring an employee. Do you agree or disagree? What are positive and negative aspects of the issue?

From first question,agree/disagree,it seems to be argument essay in which both body paragraphs will support my opinion.But second questions asks to discuss positive and negative aspects.so how should I format this essay?

Hi !

If i were to format my answer to this type of question it would be like this.please correct me Ryan if its not a good one.

Thesis: There are positive and negative effects of hiring employees based only on academic qualifications .However,I believe that the disadvantages can not be outweighed by its advantages which makes me believe that academic qualifications should not be the only factor to be considered.

B1-advantages of academic qualification
B2-disads of only academic qualification

Summary:To sum up ,while there are benefits of hiring employees based on their educational attainment,I strongly believe that it should not be the sole requirement in hiring employees.Other factors should also be considered such as personal background ,historical background and moral background in order to increase the company's standards.

Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Posted: Wed May 25, 2016 12:48 pm
by Weekend
ankushcoolz wrote:plz check this writing.......give band scores out of 9...i will be highly obliged if somebody could reply as soon as possible ....

Topic:Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.

What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Answer:: It is indeed a fact that with the advent of falsehood era, crime is increasing drastically linked to imbalance in the society.But,it has become a moot-concern that why this is and there could be some remedies. So, here I am going to scrutinize causes and solutions of this statement in this piece of writing.

As a matter of fact , first and foremost is the unemployment due to rise in population because number of the applicants are more but job vacancies are minimum.Even,over use of technology has replace man-work.Therefore,to fulfil basic needs ,young ones commit crime. For example, statistics reveal that snatching, mugging and so many other crimes are at peak in metro cities which are committed by the either juveniles or youngsters. In addition, both parents in metropolitans are bread-winners because of which it is hard to spend quality time with children as they have hectic schedule and so many daily chores to do.Hence, their offspring get deprived of parents’ guidance and moral values, which lead them to be in the bad society along with getting into malpractices. For instance, brats of rich families are often seen in such problems, quarrles and fights with their peers.

To address this problem, firstly, government must establish small-scale industries in villages, town and large scale in cities so that more and more jobs can be attained by the warm bloods of any country. Secondly, parents must spend some valuable time and understand the needs as well as problems of their children, which may bring them to be on the right path. Such as sitting for some particular time with children by having food, going out, enjoying altogether in weekends.

To conclude, after considering all the above points, I personally believe that mutual efforts of parents, law-makers and individuals need to be put for eradicating this problem from the society.
Hi !

Im not really good in writing but I can read some inaccuracies.
There are strong and weak points here in this essay.I would like to focus on the first body par.In the first body par,the strongest point i think is the second where you talked about parental guidance as it is developed quite enough thou example is not needed.The first point there thou has underlying cause why theres no employment available for the youthm e.g lack of education .I think thats a better point to consider.Lastly,please use more academic words in all parts of the essay.Thankyou

Overall its an essay on its way to success!

Please also check my essays ,Sometimes we are blinded by our own mistakes.Thankyou!

Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2016 8:11 am
by Sherzod
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Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2016 12:09 pm
by ali15
Hello people pls help me with this essay and thnx you :)


Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

Today money is playing an important part in people live, this can be seen on the way of how these people or organization spend this money carefully, it is agree that universities must indicate an equal amount of money for physical activities as for libraries, these can be shown by looking at how students interest in physical practice and how sport machines and equipment can make money for universities.

First, students are often interest in sport activities than going to library. For example, in my university, it is estimated that the numbers of students who used the gym room to practice daily is 250 students, while those who use the library to study is 50 students only, this example clearly show that student are more into physical activities instead of going to library, therefore university should allocate the same amount of money for sport activity to favor that huge number.

Second, university can gain satisfactory amount of money by renting the machines and equipment for non university members, For example, Asia Pacific University always rents their sports equipment for other universities student and individuals with very high price, these example shows that universities can make money with sport equipment and this will have an extremely benefit to the university as whole, thus, all university has to spend equally for spot activity and library and these money will defiantly retains back double.

To sum up, university student prefer to do physical practice than studying at library and also college can gain rewarding money by renting their sport properties, so university must allocate the equal amount of money for both physical activities and library, it is hope universities spends their money wisely and favor both side.

Re: Attention first time posters!

Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2017 6:39 am
by pradipje
Billions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Instead this money could be used to improve living conditions of People. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Space exploration is a highly capital intensive sector. Though billions of dollars required pouring into space study, many governments tempted to do these for its versatile application which improve human lifestyles greatly. However, not everyone is convinced this view and instead argue that same money could be used for other important development work such as infrastructure, health and education facilities improvement. In this essay, I shall analyses how research in space will lead to improvement in our understanding of weather, which in turns increase human safety greatly and increasing living standard of many people.
Firstly, USA invest huge sum of money in space experiments to get to know how about atmosphere and different weather pattern. Because of USA satellites in Space, prediction of natural calamities such as storms and draught become possible in advances. For example, in USA a recent catastrophic storm “Erma” precise location, exact date and time of landing was known due to American space superiority. Consequently, masses of people rehabilitation were done by government in advance, which saves invaluable human life and thus increase the safety of people. Therefore from above example the benefits of space expenses can be understandable.
Secondly, because of advancements in space sector, sophisticated technology development can be possible, such as global communication via Internet and Mobile services. For example, Globalisation is better experienced by means of close connectivity as people from any corner of world have virtually presence at location using video chats or call or video conferences facilities. The enhancement in human standard if lives can be experienced by even an ordinary people with a mobile hand set and data connection. So the investment in space is worth. Thus the reason why the space research should be supported can be seen.
After looking the benefits of space expenses it is concluded that it raise the lifestyle of many people around the globe. Thus in future space will attract huge finances from every nation.

Canada Sep-2017.
Letter
You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to a general manager request some necessary equipment for your future office. In your letter say
What equipment will you need and when
Explain why you will need i
Suggest where to get it from and why

Dear David,
Hello, I am your new branch Manager of XYZ Ltd, at New Delhi, first foreign office outside Europe. I am writing this letter to request you some basic and essential office equipment needed for our new office before it scheduled opening ceremony on 1st October 2017.Please allow me to explain requirement.
As you aware, for daily communication and office work, I need 5 sets of latest version desktop computers with the printer having scanning and photo copying facilities. Aside from this, high-speed broadband connection, networking equipment and round the clock computer support are keys to our function. The other needed software, office stationery, consumables and furniture list also, I have complied from my assistant. I want to make sure, all office infrastructures for day to day work is available to us as per company standard.
Moreover, I have personally visited local store of Mac Books, Dell, and IBM, also collected a competitive quotation. I will send all quotation with the purchase order for your accord so I can go ahead with delivery. I am always ready to get your feedback and collaborate with you to achieve our motto.
Looking forward to hear from you
Jay

Canada Sep-2017

Many people believe sport lessons are important in school timetable. Both boys and girls should be take part in sports. Do you agree or disagree with statements? Give your opinion and include relevant example from your own experience.

With the constant changing school curriculum and society, whether sport should be included in school and practice by both gender students is highly debatable topic. Many people argue that sport instruction should be given to male and female student in school. I personally agree with the view that physical education is beneficial to both sexes student. These will by proven by how sports instructions instill team building skills and group activity improve the student academic performance.

Firstly, sport lesson help young people to learn how to be part of team. Many games like Soccer, cricket, volleyball are best example of team sprit where each and every action of team member leads to their team victory. Thus, the team player understands the importance of how to collaborate with other members, learn communication technique which might be helpful in their real life. For example, a recent study by American Gender institute found that sports enhance collaboration between student, and boys and girls who had participated in sport are far more successful academies than those who do not. So we conclude that sport is beneficial to both male and female student education.

Secondly, sport instruction improves young student ability to cope under stressful situation and teach them how to behave and how not to behave under pressure. As most would agree, soccer player experience tremendous pressure from their huge supporting fans to perform, and thus they covert inevitable loss in win. For example, Cambridge University study demonstrate that both female and male student who are active in physical activity excel in academic education compared to who lacks it. As this example support how student who had actively participated in sport perform best in examination which might consider stressful by other. Therefore, young children of both sexes should learn sport lesson.
After looking at how sport lesson improve both male and female student team building skills and how to perform under stress, it is opinioned that sport lessons is beneficial to both gender and should be included in school timetable. It is hoped in future this idea will be gain popularity.
24.9.17
Write a letter to airline manager to find out something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter
Give details about your flight
Describe item you forgot
Explain why it is important that you get it back
Dear Manager
XYZ airline
I am writing to find you about my lost property in your flight no XC-193 from Ahmedabad to London yesterday. Please allow to explain in detail.
I travelled to London for attending my business meeting on 24th September via your flight number xc-193. During my journey I met one of friend whom I seen first time after we finished our graduation. Fortunately, he was seating just next to me. We were so engrossed in gossip about our college days that I hurriedly check out. Because of these, I think I miss to collect my leather bag from plane shelf. The bag is in black colour with labeled Puma on left side corner. The bag contains laptop with portable data storage device. Inside bag front pocket, I also put important contact diary, credit cards and bank ATM card.

It is vital for me to get back it as early as possible. Because I am feeling disabled to perform my office work without my laptop .I am ready pay for delivery and reward the staff who deposited it to your office and. For contact details I have attached flight booking detail slip.
Hope you will find it soon.

Thank you very much.

Task-2 India GT August-2017

Many people make friends through local sites and chat rooms. Other believes that it is not a good idea to make friend without meeting them face to face. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

With the proliferation of social sites such as Facebook,Twitter,and many other chat application ,the way people socialize is also changing. Many people argue that it is best to meet people online and make friends. However other contests that friendship can be developed with physical meeting. In my view both arguments have pros and cons. This will be illustrated in this essay and reasoned conclusion is drawn.

Firstly, online buddy can be helpful to an individual to explore world without limitation. Many people are searching for likeminded person around the globe using social sites for variety of reason such doing a research on common interest topic. This seems impossible if you choose to meet face to face each other. As it has barriers like you had to travel there. So I personally prefer to make online friends. For example as I am planning to migrate I just logged in expat sites and joined a group of friend. This type of instant interactivity is rarely available with our friendship as of now. So we can understand why some people like to have online friend.

On the other hand, the friends whom we meet on regular basis have their unique advantages. We can trust them more, share our emotion, and get help when we needed their physical presence. For example, When I was in financial difficulties, my friend have supported me both economically and mentally to came out of it. This kind of trust worthiness and empathy is mainly absence from online buddies even though you know him for long times. Thus, the view people should have friend whom they can meet face to face can be supported.

After looking the positive and negative aspect of virtual and real life friendship, I individually prefer to have friends whom I can meet one to one. It is suggested that people should give preference to their real life friend instead virtual.

Australia GT Sept-2017

Writing Task 1 (a letter)
You recently stayed at a hotel and had a problem there. Write an email to the manager and describe how the receptionist helped to fix the problem quickly. Include the following in your letter:
– When and where did you stay?
– What was the problem?
– How did the receptionist help you?
Dear Manager,
XYZ Hotel
Ahmedabad

I am writing to inform you about the defect I observed and how your staff helps me to reslove it while staying in your Hotel last weekend. Please let me know you exactly what happened with me.

I was accommodated on the top floor in deluxe suit in room 402. On Sunday evening while I was planning to leave for the market from my room. I observed the main door lock was not functioning properly. I myself made several unsuccessful attempts to lock it. So finally I decided to ask help from receptionist. I just called her on intercom phone. She was so gentle and down to earth as I experienced during my encounter with her. She assured me that within just few minute, a technician reach at my room and locks the door. The technicians did his job brilliantly, as same as per her word. It was very important for me as all belonging was in room and I cannot leave it open.

I indeed, appreciate her customer friendly approach. Because of your employee hospitality and readiness to help visitor makes me your loyal patron.
Many thank to your Team
Jay Rajput

Australia GT Sept-2017
Writing Task 2 (an essay)

Some people think it is a good idea to put children of different ages in the same class, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Education is highly debated topic in most countries because of it implication on children future. Many people suggest that the pupils should be grouped in classes according to their age level. However not everyone is supporting this view, many prefer alternative study arrangement and ask for mixing of different age children in class. In this essay I shall discuss both study styles and before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Firstly, student of varying age merged in same class lead to positive impact on other Childs. As most would agree with the statement as kids grow their ability to understand different subject also improve. Therefore elder students learn very quickly subject like mathematics and science compared to young one. Because of these, young children learn from their old age peer easily, as it is certainly impossible for all young children to grasp the entire lesson taught by their instructor in school. Looking in this way, the arrangement of blending children based on their age is good idea. Thus should be supported.

On the other hand, having class of same age children help teacher to impart training very easily. For example instructors design the school lesson based on their pupils’ information digesting capabilities which depends on their age. If in class student of different age mixed together it create problem for teacher to design a lesson that cater to all age group student. For example, study by British institute of child development recognizes that Children learn better if grouped according to their age. Thus, why many people prefer the idea of equal age class group can be understood.
After discussing of both study method, there are far more benefits off traditional method of schooling instead of experimenting with student of different age mixed in class. It is hoped, conventional method of school class size based on their age will not change in foreseeable future.

27.9.17

These days many people prefer to rent than buy their own house. Why is this so? Discuss the relative advantages and disadvantages of renting or buying and give your opinion.

People round the world facing housing crisis due to exponential growth in population and increasing opportunities in metros. These had led to scarcity of abode for resident especially for urban areas, which had lead to people opting for tenant ship instead of home ownership. Both the accommodation arrangements have their own positive and negative side which will be discussed in this essay and opinion will be stated in conclusion.

Firstly, In Many countries, having your own roof over your head is considered to be a privilege and directly affect person social status. For example, In India many people prefer to invest their whole life savings to buy a house for family and get a place in home owner status in society. These label sometimes a prerequisite for many families who have adult ready to entre in married life. Even, many financially unstable people choose to buy a house and signed a exorbitant mortgage contract, which often put themselves in troubles and sometimes become bankrupt. So from above discussion we can understand why many citizens make hard choice to buy a home in place of renting.
On the other hand, tenant ship is a widely accepted living arrangement in Western world. There are numerous factor contribute to this decision of people to rent a house. For one, people do not tie themselves for lifelong burden of loan repayments instead prefer to pay EMI. Secondly, people choose to be stylist and spend extravagantly on clothes, electronic gadgets, enjoying vacation abroad, which fits with modern way of life and be of moment mentality. In addition, renting house is also attributed to decreasing in personal income, insecure employment, sky rocketing property prices in urban area and growth in urban population.

From above discussion, we can see renting a house or owning a property is very difficult choice for individual or sometimes not in their own control. I personally like to be home owner as emotion and privileges attached to it. I hope people world over make wise choice based on their own circumstances.

Taiwan GT July-2017,

Some people think that parents should not give their children expensive gift. Do you agree or disagree with the statement. Give your opinion and example based on your own experience.

It is a common tradition in society, that parent give gift to their offspring, mainly on special occasion like birthdays. However, many times these are expensive one such as Sony play station, bike, car, cash etc. It is argued that moms and dads should stay away from costly present, I am agreeing with this viewpoint. This will be proven by looking at how pricey reward affects children mental development, which in turn act hindrance to their development as successful individuals and often put themselves in trouble.

For one, if family members regularly provide expensive items to young people, their feeling of want increase excessively. Moreover they do not understands, how hard their father and mother worked in order to get them it; this might create problems for children to develop as a successful individual. For example, a recent study in USA found that young one who received costly present are less likely to develop as mentally prepared to confront real world. Hence it is understandable why parent should not provide wealthy things to kids even though they can afford it.

Secondly, many times family rewards to their kids are inappropriate for their age. For example, one of my businessman friends has gifted his teenage aged boy, a 1200c sport motor bike. As a young enthusiastic rider, he decided to take a ride and on his very first road trip met to an accident. Fortunately, due to safety gear wear by him before drive, saved his life but the motorbike was completely destroyed. After this incident his parent was feeling so regret for their decision that they abandoned the idea of expensive gift to their kid in future. Thus, the idea of expensive gifting to child by parent should not be supported.

After analyzing, the negative ramification of extravagant present to their offspring by dads and moms on their psychological development and how gift might put their children life in trouble, it is concluded that gifting should be rationale. It is hoped the world over family gifting their children should be cautious about it.


Some people believe that no homework should be given to children. Other however, say that extra work is needed to succeed. Discuss both view and give your opinion, include relevant examples from your own experience.

It is highly debatable in society whether young people should be given extra class work at home. Some people argued that it is in children interest to practicing lesson at home. While other believe that young children should not study same lessons again. In this essay, I shall examine both the arguments before a reasoned conclusion is reached.

For one, practicing of lessons taught in school enhance the student ability to digest the subject easily especially Mathematics, Science and second language. Most would agree with the view that, student learn better if they do school learned things by themselves at their residence. This was particularly true for me, as I always prefer to redo my class work at home, which ultimately reflected as better grades in my school annual exam. From my personal experience, it is understandable why the idea of homework given to the child is supported.

On the other hand, there are some merits in arguments against the homework. Today majority of young child spend more than quarter of the day in school studying their curriculum. Many people argue that they do not have enough time for other vital activities such as socialising and exercise. For example, when I was in school, many of my classmates spent three hours in daily commutes plus eight hours in school education. As a result of this young kids when reached at home become so tired that they prefer to rest, instead of playing with their friends. Consequently, if these children are given extra coursework at home they become disinterested in the study and missed their childhood. After discussing above, it can be easy to conclude that school should not give homework to children.

In summing up, I have opinioned that homework boasts the student overall performances in education which determines their future success prospect and thus it should be adopted by the school. I hope conventional homework method of teaching will not be replaced in foreseeable future.

Essay

IRAN MAY-2017 GT

Many people believe that they should spend their money to enjoy life at present. Others however think that they should save it for the future. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

Money management is a vital life skill that should be mastered by every individual as it directly affects person life. With the altering social scenario, nowadays many people think that it is better to live in moment and money should be spent to enjoy it. However, others argue that people should rationally spent money and save for future. I personally support the latter view. This will be proven by looking at how live in moment mentality will sometime result in catastrophic for individual and saving habit makes life more comfortable.

Firstly, Change in social structure lead to increase in nuclear family. As an only single member of family, they are less worried about family responsibility such as child education, marriage, retirement planning and unexpected medical emergency. They want to explore world and spend extravagantly on modern comfort. This is considered by them as a way of enjoying life, as it is a popular belief in society. But many times, when this young people lose their livelihood, they often left without money. Consequently, they are not able to maintain their life styles, which inspire them to engage in illegal activities like robbery, drug habits and make their life worse. Instead if they have spent fairly on their need they might enjoy a better life. Thus it is understandable why we should not spend much in enjoying in our present life.

On the other hand, most would agree with the view, when you have hindsight about your future needs you can be better prepared for it .People that think about future and save for it, enjoy more comfortable and happy life when they needed it most. For example, my uncle has started investing in different financial means like equity, property, and deposit in their heydays helped them live life without any financial strain as a retiree. If he had not saved for his future, he might not be prepared to cope with future financial needs. Thus it is easy to say that peoples should have thinks about future when they spent money.

My conclusion is that people keeping aside money for future is better and should be adopted by people.

13.10.17

Nowadays everyone likes to travel. Some people travel alone while other prefers to travel in a group. Discuss both the approaches. Give your opinion with relevant example from your own experience.

Traveling is an individualistic choice and varies from people to people. Today people around the world choose to travel for different reason such as business, holiday and as hobbies. While some people make their journey as a lone traveler. Other, however prefer to make trip in a group with friends and families. I personally like to travel in a group as its help me to enhance my social circle and it’s a best way to socialize.

For one, travel in a group is nice way to socialize and act as catalyst for relationship development. For example, a few years ago I toured the world by road on motorbike with my social media acquaintances, whom I never meet before face to face but only, had chats and calls online. The trip has created a strong social bond between us and because of these after finishing expedition my whole team becomes a second family for me. So it is clear that my expedition opened a new door of friendship for me. Therefore, I can understand why many people choose to travel in a group.
On the contrary, many people travel to dangerous spot to gauge their mental and physical prowess. For example, one of my friends had completed climbing of Alps without any help from human and machine. After this successful trip he had conquered many highest peaks around the world. These examples illustrate reason for traveling alone. Therefore, it is clear why many people choose to travel lonely.

To sum up, I personally like to make trip in group as it expand my friend and as it cater best way socialize for me. But I too believe it also individual choice.

Re: Attention first time posters!

Posted: Tue Nov 14, 2017 4:01 pm
by BIYA
Please evaluate my first writing attempt for IELTS academic writing task 2

To be intelligent is the most important characteristic of a leader. To what extent do you agree with it.

The most significant trait which must be held by a leader is intelligence. However, in my opinion, I believe that leader is a person who must shape the entire nation, community or organization. Therefore, intelligence is one of the important traits for a successful leader, but the most important quality is inspiration.
Intelligence is very important constituent for a successful leader, as one must face so many challenges which require a sharp and active mind. A leader’s abilities are always in trial and intelligence enables the person to sense upcoming challenges and ensure readiness to cope successfully. As leadership requires taking innovative steps which are not conveniently accepted by people with conventional approaches hence questions are continuously being raised on the skills and approaches applied by a leader. Consequently, a vigilant and intelligent person is capable of answering questions raised by his team members as well as opponents.
The most important quality of a great leader is the power to inspire because a leader needs followers that understand his message and support his actions. Most intelligent people fail to spread their message in an effective manner and eventually loose followers. The innovative and creative ideas are not accepted unless delivered effectively. A great leader believes in himself and inspires his followers with his inner confidence. People work harder to achieve their inspirations rather than smart and intelligent ideas.
In conclusion, it can be said that though intelligence is an important component of successful leaders, but only intelligence cannot make a great leader. To motivate a large group and people and reach the goal successfully, as a team, a leader must have the ability to inspire people.

Re: Attention first time posters!

Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2018 8:46 pm
by Deby.125
PLEASE EVALUATE MY ESSAY
THANKS!!

Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages
Discuss both views and give your opinion



It is true that many enterprises fund sport teams or clubs with the aim to get publicity for themselves. Although many individuals consider this practice right and correct like any other promotional material, others seem to be more sceptical. Despite this, it seems to be noticeable that the benefits behind this marketing tool far overweight the negative sides.

Even though the primary aim pursued by the company sponsors is to increase their visibility, there are several social positive effects as a result of this practice. First of all, nobody would have any interest in sponsoring this kind of activities without a rise in turnover due to it. We live in a materialistic society, where most healthy activities would never be promoted for free. This means that, even if the primary aim of the sponsors is advertising themselves, these companies play a significant role in encouraging people to join sport clubs and to live an active lifestyle. For instance, private companies like Rolex are essential for many football teams which could not even remain on the market without their financial help.

Yet, some drawbacks concerning this practice should be taken into account. Among them, one seems to be the most relevant: the disparity of performances which can result in some cases: whenever the funds in favour of the involved sport team are modest and, by contrast, the company sponsor makes a great profit by advertising itself this way, the trade itself can be seen as unfair. However, this mainly depends on the negotiation skills of the counterparts.

In conclusion, whether funding sports as a way to create publicity for themselves is right or not, it is still a controversial issue. However, it is worth sharing the opinion that sponsors are almost always necessary to allow many sport clubs and teams to stay on the market.

Re: Attention first time posters!

Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2018 8:48 pm
by Deby.125
Hi! Could you please evaluate my essay? Exam in a few days!
Thank you!

Essay Adv/Disav (no opinion)
In the modern world, more and more emphasis is being placed on acquisition of practical skills rather than knowledge from text books of other sources. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.


Nowadays, it is common belief that people should be more concerned about practical skills rather than theoretical ones. Others disagree with this assumption. This essay will discuss the main positive and negative aspects of focusing on practice instead of theory.

Generally speaking, acquiring practical skills has become essential for every job seeker. Therefore, the majority of job interviewers require from their candidates some technical experience to cover a certain position. In Addition to this, internships and traineeships play a crucial role in preparing recent graduates for working life. For instance, the European program Erasmus provides a wide range of options for students aimed at gaining work experience to let them have access to the job market in an easier and faster way.

On the other hand, in-depth theoretical knowledge about the field of activity in which a potential or current worker is involved is important: without it, it is even unlikely to set objectives and targets for a company. Moreover, possessing theoretical knowledge may also affect the amount of money a worker can earn. An evidence of this can be given by the fact that having a qualification, such as a Bachelor’s Degree or a certain certificate, is almost always a requirement for doing white collar jobs, which are, in most cases, those with the highest salaries.

To sum up, many individuals consider acquiring practical experience more necessary than developing knowledge about principles or rules. This essay discussed the main advantages and drawbacks of this statement. Whether practise plays a more vital role than theory or not, it is clear that they are both significant in modern life.

Re: Attention first time posters!

Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2018 8:53 pm
by Deby.125
Hi! Could you please evaluate my essay?
Thank you a lot!

In many cities crime is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce crime levels?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is true that the crime rate has been rising, especially in larger cities. Many factors are at the root of this serious issue. However, several researches have shown that this is mainly related to educational aspects and information. Thus, governments should tackle crime by improving educational system.

Education and information are both elements to take into account when it comes to offence. Schools and universities play a crucial role in affecting one’s behaviour as an individual and should be the places, in tandem with home, where people learn what is right and wrong and the effects of one’s behaviour on our society. For this reason, the lack of educational and preventative initiatives concerning crime may result in an increase in offences. For Instance, according to several university studies, pupils attending schools where workshops about civil rights and justice take place are less likely to become vandalists or robbers in the future.

Therefore, governments should promote crime-related educational activities in state schools. It would be also necessary to encourage companies by financial incentives to allow workers to attend training courses connected with bribery, fraud and corporate crime. Learning more about crime and the related punishments can be seen as one of the most powerful preventative measures against offence. Take the financial companies operating in Japan, one of the countries with the lowest crime rate, as an example. Most employers there make sure that their staff are well educated about preventative measures at fighting crime and the consequences of committing offence.

To sum up, offence, one of the main issues in our society, is increasing in today’s world. The lack of an efficient educational system may represent one of the most significant causes of this phenomenon. Yet, governments can take action to combat crime by encouraging both institutions and enterprises to develop crime-related education programs.


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