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custard123
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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


How to spend our life is a right we are given when we become an adult and this decision is key to our happiness. Consequently we will always have a mix of people in the world of some who prefer routine and security in their life, and others who need variety to ensure the spice in their life. This essay will consider both these views.

Whether people living a repetitive life is justified or not depends on the reasons why. People need routine and direction in their lives. Without it, many become lost souls. In addition, it is understandable that many feel secure doing something they are familiar with on a daily basis and therefore avoid change. Often in fast-paced modern society, there is little free time. The convenience of, for instance, knowing exactly where to find groceries for cooking or a tool for fixing the broken shower we can all appreciate. To some extent if people are genuinely content with life as it is and are loving life’s journey, we may ask, why change? However, if this stable life is due to fear of change, then questions need to be asked.

We all know the saying ‘Variety is the spice of life’. Boredom normally exists from repetitive routines, but changes are what keep life experiences fresh and enjoyable. A good life can be argued to be determined by how many great stories one has when one is in his/her later years. A variety in careers, lived locations and sights seen can certainly tick the boxes there. Consequently, wisdom and a huge array of skills can also be gained. Moreover, it is healthy to keep the brain active by providing it with different daily challenges, which has been scientifically proven to lower the chances of dementia.

In summary, clearly the decision of which way to live is better is all down to the individual and what suits their personal character and desires in life. Fear is what stops many living life to the maximum. As long as this does not impact on a person’s decision, then there is no reason why we cannot all live happily. So, next time you hear of someone who has stuck at a career for forty consecutive years, question whether they should be admired or not!
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Competitivness has become an important quality of the society. How has competitiveness effected individuals? Is this good quality or not?
Nowadays, competitions are very important for society. It is relating to a situation in which people or group trying to win a contest. Every person has ability to be more successful in his life.
Moreover, some people in society organized many type of function and different types of games for other people. A lot of people participated in these activities. Every person tries to show his ability in these types of activities, which is an important quality of the society. Furthermore, in our society young esters interested to play cricket. A society committee chooses the brilliant players and helps them to achieve their goals in life. For example committee organized matches between two teams and select good players after that they also distribute the prizes to winner team. Furthermore, these types of competitions developed encouraged, abilities, determinations in man life, this helps a person to bright his future.
On the other hand, some people do not give importance in these types of activities. They have limited life only home to work or school. That kind of people have no interested in competitions maybe they afraid to face their failure.
In my opinion, person shows their qualities to everyone and should participate in different kind of activities. We should develop our abilities and estimate our self where we are in our life. We also should struggle in our life to achieve aim.
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