Discuss both views essay

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Discuss both views essay

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Some people think that in the modern world we have become more dependent on each other, while others think that people are now more independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


Today modern life has a great impact on people life. This can be seen on the way individuals interact with each other. Many people believed that in modern life people become more dependent on each other, while other think that individuals are now more independent. On this essay both side of the debate will be analyzed before drawing conclusion.

On the one hand, some people support the idea that human being have become more dependent on the modern world. For example, as life become so difficult and demanding, working parents tend to rely on unemployed elderly family member to help taking care of the children. This example shows that, as parents work for many hours a day, they do not have much time to fulfill their children’s needs and give them love, elder family member such as grandmother could help doing that in satisfying way. Thus, it is understandable why many individuals believe people are more dependent on each other.

On the other hand, many people think that people are more independent on modern world. For instance, modern technology helped people to do their tasks with their own. This example illustrates that, people can use washing machine to do laundry or use internet for self-studying without need help of other. Therefore, it is understandable that many people think individuals are very independent in modern life.

Following this look at varying opinion regarding this debate, it is felt that human beings become extremely independent in the modern world. It is expected that people will continue on this behavior as long as they depend on machines and technology.
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Re: Discuss both views essay

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Hello!

The conclusion is not personal ... and is actually not very clear, particularly since it completely dismisses the points made in the first main paragraph.

Grammar tends to be simple and use of conditionals, modals and adverbs is limited.

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ali15 wrote: Fri Jul 14, 2017 7:10 am Some people think that in the modern world we have become more dependent on each other, while others think that people are now more independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


Today modern life has a great impact on people. This can be seen in the way individuals interact with each other. Many people believe that in modern life, we become more dependent on each other, while others think that individuals are now more independent. In this essay, both sides of the debate will be analyzed before a conclusion is drawn.

On the one hand, some people support the idea that human beings have become more dependent in the modern world. For example, as life has become so difficult and demanding, working parents tend to rely on unemployed, elderly family members to help take care of the children. This example shows that, as parents work for many hours a day, they do not have much time to fulfill their children’s needs and give them love, elder family members such as grandparents, can help. Thus, it is understandable why many individuals believe people are more dependent on each other.

On the other hand, many people think that people are more independent in the modern world. For instance, modern technology helps people to do tasks on their own. For example, people can use a washing machine to do laundry, or use the internet to study without help from anyone else. Therefore, it is understandable that many people think individuals are very independent in modern life.

After considering both sides of this debate, it is felt that human beings have become extremely independent in the modern world. It is expected that people will continue this behavior as long as they depend on machines and technology.
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