Discuss both side and give your opinion essay

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ali15
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Discuss both side and give your opinion essay

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Today the world is witnessing a huge development in the field of robotics technology. However, this improvement in robotics technology is considered a debated topic. Some individuals believe that robotics technology will play a key factor in the future, while other feel that this technology could have a negative result to society. This essay will analyze both side of the debate before drawing a conclusion.

One the one hand, robotics are more efficient and reliable in term of duty. For example, robotics are employed in factories to increase the productivity and improve the quality of the products, in addition to that, robotics can be assigned to work in dangerous area such as area near nuclear radiation or fire. As these examples shows, using robotics in manufacturing will result to produce a larger number of an excellent products with affordable price to customers and also operating robots in hazard area instead of human will help to save many people life. Thus, the benefit of robotics technology in society can be seen.

On the other hand, the development of robotic technology will lead people to lose their jobs. For instance, business owner will tend to replace costly skillful worker with advance robotics to save money. This example illustrates that, as robots replaced human, many people will be unemployed and they will have no income, this trend might encourage people to look for other illegal source of incomes such as trafficking drugs or build up prostitution network or stealing money and that will lead to instability in society. Therefore, the negative ramification of robotics technology in community is clear.

Following this look at varying opinion of this debate. It is felt that the technology of robotics have huge negative consequences to the society. It is recommended that this technology have to be just a supplement to human in workplace in the foreseeable future.
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Re: Discuss both side and give your opinion essay

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Basically, quite a good essay. Your point about jobs is often cited with regard to this topic, but it actually doesn't stand up in reality. According to your argument, Japan should have massive unemployment and crime. It doesn't.

With regard to grammar, you tend to use 'will' rather than more suitable modals.

Vocabulary is good, with some topic-specific items.

Regarding the conclusion, it's your opinion, but I can't help thinking 'Japan' which is the country that is widely regarded as furthest ahead with robotics. At the very least, the conclusion needs more justification.

All the best,
David
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