Kindly evaluate writing task 1

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zeeshi16
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Kindly evaluate writing task 1

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Time: 22 mins

The line graph, comprising of four components, represents the amounts of materials which were transported in the UK over a period of 28 years. The different modes of transport used were road, water, rail, and pipeline.

It is clear that all means of conveyance experienced an increase in numbers. Roads were the most popular means throughout the 28 years.

Starting in 1974, people favored roads for carrying their goods from one place to another, approximately 70 million tonnes transported this way. Water and rail roads saw similar numbers at 40 million tonnes each while pipelines were the least used method of transport. Over the years, people continued using road, water and pipeline routes for transporting goods as the figures progressed steadily for these while railway lines lost popularity in the middle years.

In 2002, roads remained the major means used for transport with the annual amount of goods transported hiking dramatically to 99 million tonnes. In comparison, pipelines still were the least favored route, although, its numbers increased compared to 1974. Water routes and railway roads, starting similarly in 1974, saw a disparity in the amount transported through these means, with 65 million tonnes for water and 41 million tonnes transported by trains.

In conclusion, businessmen are still favoring roads for transporting goods as in the past while the other means are less often used.
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Re: Kindly evaluate writing task 1

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

This graph is a little tricky, but your report is quite good. You have a good summary, but the details are lacking.

You definitely need more figures.

I suggest taking each line in turn and leaving a comparison mainly for the summary.

Vocabulary and grammar are both good. You use some good 'change' and 'comparison' vocabulary. The range of structures is very good, though there are some mistakes. However, meaning is generally clear.

This could very easily be improved into a very good report.

All the best,
David
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