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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas are used in many countries. Some said alternative sources of energy should be put in use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?


Fossil fuels, the conventional natural energy is widely used all over the world. While amid the threat of exhausting natural resources and ever-fast deteriorated environment, alternative sources of energy are highly recommended.

Traditional energy is nearly run out and new types of energy is needed to be exploited to support evolution of human society. With the swelling of population and massive expansion of industry, enormous amount of energy like coal, oil and natural gas have been digging out and consuming. The totaled volume of preservation of old-fashioned energy is apprehensive and additionally, it takes ages to form fossil fuels, which means the process of recreation cannot be in line with the demand for demographic development. Both the fast consumption and the slow process to form these energies urge people to explore new types of energy.

On the other hand, using fossil fuels is harmful to environment, thus, energy environment-friendly is demanded as substitutions. Mostly employed to supply power, energy like coal cannot be burnt thoroughly or the use of which is inefficient, causing unnecessary wastes. Meanwhile, burning process of these fossil fuels gives out gases, poisoning the environment. We do see how much damaging the emission of greenhouse gas like carbon dioxide could be. Thus, new energy is essential to relief environment pollution.

To conclude, as traditional energy is on the brink of worn-out and generates pollutants that does harm to the environment we live in, alternative sources of energy is in need.
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tinalongmao wrote: Mon Jun 12, 2017 12:12 pm Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas are used in many countries. Some said alternative sources of energy should be put in use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?


Fossil fuels, the conventional natural energy, is widely used all over the world. Whilst amid the threat of exhausting natural resources and damaging the environment, alternative sources of energy are highly recommended.

Traditional energy has nearly run out and new types of energy are needed to support the evolution of human society. With the swelling of the global population andthe massive expansion of industry, enormous amounts of energy like coal, oil and natural gas have been mined and consumed. The totaled volume of preservation of old-fashioned energy is apprehensive and additionally,(<--I don't understand this sentence.) it takes ages to form fossil fuels, which means the process of refining cannot keep up with demand. Both the fast consumption and the slow process to form these energies are motivating people to explore new types of energy.

In addition, using fossil fuels is harmful to the environment. Thus, environmentally-friendly energy is demanded as a better alternative. Mostly employed to supply power, energy like coal cannot be burnt thoroughly and is inefficient, causing unnecessary waste. Meanwhile, the burning process of these fossil fuels gives out gases, poisoning the environment. We can see how much damage the emission of greenhouse gases like carbon dioxide causes. Thus, new energy is essential to relieve environmental pollution.

To conclude, as traditional energy is on the brink of disappearing, and also generates pollutants that do harm to the environment we live in, alternative sources of energy are a necessity.
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