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Below are several samples for Part 1 and Part 2. I would appreciate an estimate of my current band and some tips on improving it quickly(the exam is in two weeks).
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Part 1 - bar chart:The bar chart shows the volume of Information Technologies and Service Industry as a percentage of UK GDP in a period from 1992 to 2000. Both components have risen steadily during this timeframe.
IT Industry, depicted in blue, was responsible for six percent of UK Gross Domestic Product in 1992. In eight years this share has increased to about fifteen percent. IT has encountered a small decline in 1994 to 1996, but in the four years leading to 2000 it has grown sharply.
The second component, shown in purple, is the Service Industry. Starting at four percent in 1992, it gained additional share every year, resulting in eight percent of GDP in 2000. The growth rate of this industry is consistent, but small.
Share of IT Industry was always greater than that of Service Industry. In 1994 and 1996 the difference was quite small, but in 1998 it jumped to four percent. In the last data point it is even greater - more than six percent.
Several examples of my writing - please review
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Part 2: helping developing countriesDeep differences in life conditions between the "first world" and the developing countries are the topic of worldwide discussions in the last decades. Many people argue that the rich lands have to be more involved in the betterment of the poorer parts of the world, but there are many issues that can hinder this collaboration. In my opinion, primary responsibility for the development lies with the country and its government, however the developed nations need to provide some assistance. Improvement of health and education systems in the poorer regions will also benefit the rich countries in the long run.
It is clear that at the current stage most underdeveloped countries are not able to close the infrastructure gap by themselves. They lack the necessary technologies, capital and professionals. Outdated and underfunded education systems cannot produce the specialists required to implement and maintain the modern equipment and weak legal systems cause capital outflows and impede investments. The prominent examples in the healthcare area are the large scale epidemies that yearly occur in Africa and South America.
The "rich men" of the world, especially the Great Seven countries, have the resources to alleviate these problems. They also have a certain moral responsibility, because some of their wealth was extracted from their former colonies. Already there are many nongovernmental organizations, international bodies and private enterprises that are implementing various development programs in the underdeveloped regions.
However, such projects can be less beneficial if local government and people are not adequately involved. Funds get misused or just stolen and advanced equipment falls out of use without local trained operators. As a result, many factories, scientific laboratories and power stations can be found in a state of disrepair around the developing countries.
To conclude, some help from the rich countries is required to lift their less fortunate peers from poverty and gloom. However, if this assistance is not organized in a sustainable way, resources will be wasted without a lasting benefit. But if done correctly, such investments can really improve life in the poorer regions.
It is clear that at the current stage most underdeveloped countries are not able to close the infrastructure gap by themselves. They lack the necessary technologies, capital and professionals. Outdated and underfunded education systems cannot produce the specialists required to implement and maintain the modern equipment and weak legal systems cause capital outflows and impede investments. The prominent examples in the healthcare area are the large scale epidemies that yearly occur in Africa and South America.
The "rich men" of the world, especially the Great Seven countries, have the resources to alleviate these problems. They also have a certain moral responsibility, because some of their wealth was extracted from their former colonies. Already there are many nongovernmental organizations, international bodies and private enterprises that are implementing various development programs in the underdeveloped regions.
However, such projects can be less beneficial if local government and people are not adequately involved. Funds get misused or just stolen and advanced equipment falls out of use without local trained operators. As a result, many factories, scientific laboratories and power stations can be found in a state of disrepair around the developing countries.
To conclude, some help from the rich countries is required to lift their less fortunate peers from poverty and gloom. However, if this assistance is not organized in a sustainable way, resources will be wasted without a lasting benefit. But if done correctly, such investments can really improve life in the poorer regions.
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Part 2: child labor
Underage labor is a controversial topic around the world. There are different ways young people in different countries are engaged in the workforce and some of them cause international disapproval and even calls for blanket prohibition of underage work. We will discuss the different aspects of this issue and show that strict controls and thoughtful organization are required to organize effective introduction of the younger population into the labor force.
Since times immemorial child labor is a part of the economic landscape of the world. Especially in developing countries, many industries depend on it to maintain low costs. That means that children are paid very low wages and have to work long hours, sometimes in unbearable conditions. Not being of legal age and having no real education, these young workers cannot stand for themselves and rarely even know their rights. Such exploitation has led to an outcries from various international bodies and NGOs. Many of them call for a total ban on underage labor.
On the other hand, earlier introduction to the working environment has its own benefits. The sooner an individual sees the efforts that go into the products and services he consumes, the better he will value them. Trying one's hand at a job also helps to select the future profession. Additional earned income is also important, especially for teenagers.
To summarize, some work experience in the young age is definitely beneficial, but exploitation has to be prevented. The extent and conditions of underage employment must be defined by law and controlled by authorities. If organized in a right way, the practice will be beneficial both for employers and future workers.
Underage labor is a controversial topic around the world. There are different ways young people in different countries are engaged in the workforce and some of them cause international disapproval and even calls for blanket prohibition of underage work. We will discuss the different aspects of this issue and show that strict controls and thoughtful organization are required to organize effective introduction of the younger population into the labor force.
Since times immemorial child labor is a part of the economic landscape of the world. Especially in developing countries, many industries depend on it to maintain low costs. That means that children are paid very low wages and have to work long hours, sometimes in unbearable conditions. Not being of legal age and having no real education, these young workers cannot stand for themselves and rarely even know their rights. Such exploitation has led to an outcries from various international bodies and NGOs. Many of them call for a total ban on underage labor.
On the other hand, earlier introduction to the working environment has its own benefits. The sooner an individual sees the efforts that go into the products and services he consumes, the better he will value them. Trying one's hand at a job also helps to select the future profession. Additional earned income is also important, especially for teenagers.
To summarize, some work experience in the young age is definitely beneficial, but exploitation has to be prevented. The extent and conditions of underage employment must be defined by law and controlled by authorities. If organized in a right way, the practice will be beneficial both for employers and future workers.
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Part 1: Bar chart - Teams scores
The bar chart displays the scores of three teams over four seasons in a period from 2002 to 2005. All teams have different trends in their scores.
Team A is depicted in orange. The lowest score for Team A is five points in the first season, the highest is 35 points in 2004. The color blue is assigned to Team B. This team has the highest scores in all seasons, ranging from 43 in 2004 to 82 in 2002. Purple bars show the scores for Team C. This team has scored the most points in the second season (fifteen), and in the last year it collected only 5 points.
The biggest difference of 72 points between the highest scoring team and the runner-up was observed in the first season. In 2004, the margin was much narrower, just eight points.
The bar chart displays the scores of three teams over four seasons in a period from 2002 to 2005. All teams have different trends in their scores.
Team A is depicted in orange. The lowest score for Team A is five points in the first season, the highest is 35 points in 2004. The color blue is assigned to Team B. This team has the highest scores in all seasons, ranging from 43 in 2004 to 82 in 2002. Purple bars show the scores for Team C. This team has scored the most points in the second season (fifteen), and in the last year it collected only 5 points.
The biggest difference of 72 points between the highest scoring team and the runner-up was observed in the first season. In 2004, the margin was much narrower, just eight points.