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Ligy
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some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers,whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children.discuss both views and give your own opinion ?

Some would argue that school teachers should not give home assignments to their pupils,while others say that homework would assist the students to attain high scores in academics.This essay agrees with the statement that giving assignments after school hours to children are not acceptable as it puts students under pressure as well as take away their time for extra curricular activities.

On the one hand,it is believed that, homework is an inevitable part of traditional educational system as it improves the educational performance of students.The supporters of this view claimed that children would be in touch with study materials even after the school hours while doing homework.This enables them to get a deeper understanding of the topic ,which they studied at school, and they can also clarify their doubts, which pop up during home work, with their teacher at the very next day that would help them to achieve high scors in exams.For instance,students from Asian schools, which are following homework system,are the top scorers of subjects such as maths and science internationally.However,i believe that revising study materials after school hours would be a stressful task for most of the students because they may experience difficulty in focusing subjects after long school hours.

On the other hand,home assignments are not necessary as it puts the students under pressure and they may lack interest in studying. This is because children have to spent almost same as school hours for doing assignments at home which may prevent them from engaging in physical activities. Moreover,parents are also bullying their children for studying. As a results of this, pupils may develop a negative attitude towards studying and sometimes they may also fail in exams.For example,recent study conducted among school children in India reveals that 70 percent of children are against home assignments as it increases the stress level.I believe that, schools should focus on the holistic development of the children that may only possible through abolishing homework system from school curriculum.

To conclude,although homework enables the students to perform well at school,it creates stress and anxiety among students and they may also lack time for relaxation.It is recommended that schools authorities should allow their students for completing their assignments at school time.
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Ligy wrote: Sat Jun 03, 2017 1:20 pm some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers,whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children.discuss both views and give your own opinion ?

Some would argue that school teachers should not give home assignments to their pupils, while others say that homework helps the students to attain high scores in academics. This essay agrees with the statement that giving assignments after school hours to children is not acceptable, as it puts students under pressure as well as takes away their time for extra curricular activities.

On the one hand, it is believed that homework is an inevitable part of the traditional educational system as it improves the educational performance of students. The supporters of this view claim that children are in touch with study materials even after school hours while doing homework. This enables them to gain a deeper understanding of the topics they studied at school, and they can also clarify their doubts, which pop up during homework, with their teacher the next day. This helps them to achieve high scores in exams. For instance, students from Asian schools, which follow the homework system, are the top scorers internationally, in subjects such as maths and science. However, I believe that revising study materials after school hours would be a stressful task for most of the students because they may experience difficulty in focusing on subjects after long school hours.

On the other hand, home assignments are not necessary as they put the students under pressure and they may lack interest in studying. This is because children have to spend almost the same number of school hours at home, doing homework, which may prevent them from engaging in physical activities. Moreover, parents are also bullying their children to study. As a results of this, pupils may develop a negative attitude towards studying and sometimes they may also fail in exams. For example, arecent study conducted among school children in India revealed that 70 percent of children are against home assignments as they increase the stress level. I believe that schools should focus on the holistic development of the children, which may only be possible through abolishing the homework system from the school curriculum.

To conclude, although homework enables the students to perform well at school, it creates stress and anxiety among students, and they may also lack time for relaxation. It is recommended that school authorities should allow their students time at school for completing their assignments.
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