KINDLY CORRECT THIS TASK 2 ON RAISING THE AGE LIMIT TO DRIVE

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KINDLY CORRECT THIS TASK 2 ON RAISING THE AGE LIMIT TO DRIVE

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AGE IS A CONTROVERSIAL FACTOR THAT PROVIDE LEGAL ACCESS IN SEVERAL DOMAINS AS PER THE LEGISLATION OF ONE'S COUNTRY,DRIVING IS ONE OF THEM.THE AGE LIMIT TO ATTAIN A DRIVING LICENSE IN INDIA IS AT THE AGE OF 18,AN AGE MATURE ENOUGH TO START DRIVING.THERE ARE SEVERAL REASONS FOR ME TO SUPPORT THIS VIEW.
FIRSTLY,DRUNK DRIVING AND OVER SPEED ARE THE MAIN CULPRITS BEHIND THE SURGING RATE OF ROAD TRAFFIC ACCIDENTS IRRESPECTIVE OF THE AGE OF THE DRIVERS.FOR INSTANCE,STUDIES AFFIRMS THAT ONE THIRD OF DEATH INVOLVED IN ROAD ACCIDENTS IS THE RESULT OF ALCOHOL -IMPAIRED DRIVING CRASHES,WHICH IS NOT ONLY A HABIT IN TEENAGERS,BUT ALSO IN OLDER PEOPLE.THIS CAN BE REDUCED BY ENFORCING STRINGENT LAWS AGAINST DRUNKEN DRIVERS TO ENSURE ROAD SAFETY.
IN ADDITION TO THIS ,INEXPERIENCED DRIVERS,PARTICULARLY THOSE WHO JUST STARTED THEIR DRIVING ARE TOP AMONG ROAD ACCIDENT VICTIMS,WHICH COULD NOT BE CURBED BY UPLIFTING THE AGE LIMIT.TO BE CLEAR,IF THERE IS A RAISE IN AGE OF GETTING A LICENSE TO 25,THESE PEOPLE REMAIN INEXPERINCED AT THAT TIME.INSTEAD OF THAT, THE GOVERNMENT MUST ADD FORMAL TRAINING COURSES MANDATORY BEFORE GETTING THE DRIVING LICENSE TO ADVANCE THE STANDARD OF DRIVING.
SOME WOULD ARGUE THAT YOUNGSTERS LACK MATURITY TO OBTAIN THE LICENSE,IT IS NOT JUSTIFIABLE IN A SOCIETY THAT TAKE PEOPLE AS MILITANTS TO FIGHT AT BORDERS AT AN AGE OF 18.TO EXEMPLIFY,AT THE AGE OF 18 PEOPLE ARE CONSIDERED TO BE INDEPENDENT AS THEY CAN VOTE AND HAVE MUCH POWER IN DECISION MAKING.THUS ,EDUCATING YOUTH TO BE MORE RESPONSIBLE AND ACCOUNTABLE WOULD BE A BETTER ALTERNATIVE TO RAISING THE AGE FOR DRIVER'S LICENSE FOR THE BETTERMENT OF ROAD SAFETY.
AS THE ABOVE SHOWS,WHAT I INFER IS THAT INCREASING THE AGE FOR GETTING A DRIVING LICENSE IS NOT AN EFFECTIVE METHOD FOR SECURING ROAD SAFETY.I HOPE THAT GOVERNMENT WOULD IMPLEMENT BETTER MEASURES LTO ENHANCE ROAD SAFETY.
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Re: KINDLY CORRECT THIS TASK 2 ON RAISING THE AGE LIMIT TO DRIVE

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COULD U PLEASE CORRECT THIS ESSAY???
ANYONE???
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Re: KINDLY CORRECT THIS TASK 2 ON RAISING THE AGE LIMIT TO DRIVE

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Hello. Writing in all caps is very difficult to read, and it is also very difficult to correct grammar.
Next time, please use upper and lower case letters.
Thanks!
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