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arsa818
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Please evaluate Task 2 response (thanks)

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global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment.
What causes global warming?
What solutions are there to this problem.

There is no doubt that earth climate is changing rapidly. It is considered that the increase in global temperature has some serious threats to the world's environment. In this essay I will analyze the causes associated with this alarming trend and recommend some solutions.

Recent human activities are leading to global warming this includes burning of fossil fuel and deforestation. Since the industrial revolution, high need of energy demands are mostly fulfilled through oil. Burning of this oil creates huge amount of carbon-dioxide into atmosphere . Secondly, cutting of trees on massive scale add fuel to this problem because rain forest helps in maintaining oxygen level into air.

However, there are multiple solution available at individual and government level to counter this growing trend. Individuals can contribute by selecting public transport for their daily commute rather to use private cars as these cars are the main source of co2 omission . Governments should encourage investment in renewable energy source such as wind and solar. This could be achieved by providing subsidy on plants and equipments that use green energy and impose higher rate of tax on fossil fuel power generation system. As a result, oil importing bill will be reduced and surplus money could be utilized on other different development projects.

To sum up, global warming is a serious matter of concern which need immediate attention from both government and its citizens. If recommended solutions were adopted by concern authorities, definitely this will help in mitigating the problem.
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Re: Please evaluate Task 2 response (thanks)

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Overall, this is a good essay.

Introduction - There is still some doubt over whether global warming is happening.

First main paragraph - These points could be a little more developed.

Second main paragraph - Basically, yes, but the money saved on oil will surely be eaten up by green energy. Also, cars are not the main source of CO2 emissions.

Conclusion - Actually, many environmentalists now say that even if measures like these are taken, global warming cannot be stopped.

However, the use of a wide range of vocabulary and grammar structures does give your essay a boost. There are still basic errors, but they do not interfere with meaning or understanding. Good use of connectives and referencing!

All the bst,
David
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