Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. To what extent

[altinbek11]

Tourism has become one of the main benefits of globalisation and democracy as well as international contracts. However, some feel that tourism attacks the national identity and have social, economic and ecological drawbacks, others believe that it build a bond of friendship between nations. I believe that its benefits far outweigh the drawbacks
Firstly, we must consider the potential positive effects of contact between cultures, because development of tourism industry paves the way for cultural exchange between people around the world. If we go back to the beginning of the industrialisation, there were catastrophic conflicts between people, who were migrated from overseas, which were the misunderstanding of cultural norms and values as well as religious beliefs. Now, in consequence of tourism, many people have the chance to visit other countries and assimilate the knowledge about other cultures, and governments also encourage this process in order to enhance the peaceful process around the world.
A further reason to be effective of this idea is the economic aspect. Cultural understanding about social norms, values and beliefs between people contributed to the development of global trade. In most cases, the bond between entrepreneurs, which built as a result of tourism, has accumulated the export and import dramatically.
On the other hand, it also has to be considered that tourism has adverse effects on the environment in some countries. Some tourists and tourism companies have not executed their social responsibility for the environment, and it resulted in habitat loss, pollution, and endangered animals and the biosphere in some countries.
To conclude, tourism has contributed to the development of the relationship between nations and as well as to the economic collaboration. In the long term, it will be the effective method to unite all nations as one nation in order to solve global challenges.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

I think that you have mixed up tourism and immigration. The environmental aspect may be true, but you haven't really separated it from general economic development and you haven't related it to international understanding.

Vocabulary and grammar are not used to provide a good answer to the question.

All the best,
David