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please assess writing task two (my best)

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Question : In some countries governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside big cities.

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Industrial production is the main backbone of any nation's economy, so it is important for governments to support factories. Some nation's management are pushing factories and related businesses to shift from urban areas. This essay will analyze pros and cons of such decision.

On one hand, big cities will definitely benefit if industries move to rural areas. For instance, heavy transportation that supply raw material to factories use main road routes of these metropolitan cities. This end-up in massive traffic jams and congestion on roads. Secondly, mostly industries do not dispose off their waste properly. These un-managed waste infiltrate water supply system. For instance, factories in Faisalabad, cotton production city of Pakistan, do not properly manage their waste despite the fact that government waste management policy exist. Thus underground water resources of the city got chemical containment and no more use-able for drinking. Disadvantages of having industries in cities can be seen.

On other hand, industry provides jobs to the people of big metropolitan cities, Labor intense industries are always in need of skilled labor and big cities have such workers in abundance. If factories move to rural areas, they could not find skilled workers in nearby small cities or labor have to commute long distance for work. This will lead to economic turn down. Secondly, it is easy for industry and businesses to manage infrastructure available in Urban areas so they can afford competitive prices of their products in international markets. For example, the overhead cost will definitely increase if businesses have to develop basic structure for their production. thus the benefits of having industrial zones in cities are certain.

In conclusion, it is true that cities may face some problems if they host factories. However, industry and business is the symbol of economic growth of every nation and metropolitan cities need them to prosper in future. It is thus proven, that advantages of having factories in cities outweigh disadvantages.


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arsa818 wrote: Thu Feb 02, 2017 5:17 pm Question : In some countries governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside big cities.(<--This is a statement. What is the question?)

Answer.
Industrial production is the main backbone of any nation's economy, so it is important for governments to support factories. Some nations' management is pushing factories and related businesses to shift from urban areas. This essay will analyze the pros and cons of such a decision.

On one hand, big cities will definitely benefit if industries move to rural areas. For instance, heavy transportation that supply raw materials to factories use the main routes of these cities. This leads to massive traffic jams and congestion on the roads. Secondly, mostly industries do not dispose of their waste properly. This un-managed waste can infiltrate the water supply system. For instance, factories in Faisalabad that produce cotton, donot properly manage their waste despite the fact that a government waste management policy exists. Thus, underground water resources of the city have been contaminated and are no longer fit for drinking. The disadvantages of having industries in cities can be seen.

On other hand, industry provides jobs to the people of big cities. Labor-intensive industries are always in need of skilled laborers, and big cities have such workers in abundance. If factories move to rural areas, they will not find skilled workers in nearby small cities, or laborers will have to commute a long distance for work. This will lead to economic downturn. Secondly, it is easy for industry and businesses to function with the infrastructure available in urban areas, so they can afford competitive prices of their products in international markets. For example, the overhead cost will definitely increase if businesses have to develop basic structure for their production. Thus, the benefits of having industrial zones in cities are certain.

In conclusion, it is true that cities may face some problems if they host factories. However, industry and business is the symbol of economic growth of every nation, and cities need them to prosper. It is thus proven that the advantages of having factories in cities outweigh the disadvantages.


The end .. Please evaluate the band score.
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