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abbasazarmehrput
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Please critique my speaking and let me know about my mark

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Describe a competition( or contest) that you have entered

You should say:

when the competition took place

what was good about it

why you remember this event
Describe a competition or contest.mp3
Describe a contest
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David.IELTS.Examiner
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Re: Please critique my speaking and let me know about my mark

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Hello!

Fluency - Speech is much too slow. There are some unnecessary pauses.

Coherence - A good range of connectives is used and sentences are in a very order.

Vocabulary - Good range of vocabulary. Not many mistakes.

Grammar - Not many mistakes, but I think that you need to use a much wider range of structures.

Pronunciation - Clear. You attempt intonation but the very slow speech means that use of intonation is limited.
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Re: Please critique my speaking and let me know about my mark

Post by abbasazarmehrput »

Hi David,

Thank you very much for critiquing my recording. I was wondering if you could possibly let me know whether with this approach can I get 7 or higher? or I should employ another strategy for my coming exam held on the 9th of January, 2016.

Could you please do me a favour and analyse my other recording posted in the speaking section of this?

In the end, I just want to say thanks to you for your time allocating for people like me. God bless you and your family.

Best wishes,

Abbas
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Re: Please critique my speaking and let me know about my mark

Post by lmoore »

Hello, abbasazarmehrput!

Thanks for sharing your story about the ping pong competition. It sounded really interesting and like you had a great time, especially visiting your family.

First, I would say that you, in general, have a good command of English. You used transitions well, as David.IELTS.Examiner said. The organization of your speech was good overall.

I could hear that you tried to use some higher-level vocabulary like “eye-catching.” You used these words correctly. I would encourage you to continue to increase your range of vocabulary by studying synonyms for commonly-used words.

Your pronunciation is very clearly enunciated much of the time, but your slower speed of speech makes your speech sound a bit halted. It’s not as natural and conversational as it should be. Particularly, the /th/ sound is still difficult for you. Make sure you put your tongue between your teeth when you say words like “with” and “other.”

Here are some other notes:
I participated in different competitions and contests FOR my life – IN my life
My ping pong competition which held one year ago – which WAS held one year ago
Sponsored by national Iranian gas company – by A national Iranian gas company
Three teams – pronunciation – sounded like TREE
To score as far as I could – as HIGH as I could
With, other, - TH pronunciation
Near to the . . .province – NEAR the. . .province (not “near to”)
I and my colleagues – My colleagues and I
Mem OR a ble – pronunciation – Emphasize first syllable – MEM or a ble.

Best wishes as you continue to practice!
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