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kevinsetiadi
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Task 2 - need feedback

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Describe an exciting sport you enjoy.

You should say
-what it is
-when you first got involved in it
-what’s involved
and why you find it exciting.

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I haven't spoken English for a long time so this is my current level of speaking. If I have to assess myself, I think I have too many pauses, uses too many "umm", repeats myself a lot, and need to work on pronunciation.

Please listen to it and give me your honest feedback. Please also give me a score if you can. Thanks!
raniamostafa
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How did you post it??

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raniamostafa
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No coherence. Very fast

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Post by lmoore »

Hi, kevinsetiadi,

Thank you for sharing information about the sport you play! I didn’t quite catch the name of it, but it sounds really interesting.

Your vocabulary is quite good. I heard “synthetic,” for example. I wouldn’t worry too much about vocabulary as you practice for the IELTS.

Pronunciation is quite good, but watch how you say “exciting.” It sounds like you’re saying, “eggziting.” Make sure you say, “ECKSiting.”

I would encourage you to use more transitions, an introduction, and a conclusion to give your answer more structure and coherence. The overall organization is not quite to the level it should be.

You have a good grasp of grammar in general, and I heard some higher-level grammar structures, such as “much more fast-paced.” You could use a bit of work in grammar, however. Here are some notes:
--I got first involved in middle school – I FIRST GOT involved in middle school
--22 people who’s willing to play – who ARE willing to play

Best wishes as you continue to practice!
kevinsetiadi
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Post by kevinsetiadi »

Imoore,

Thanks for your detailed feedback. The sport is called "futsal".

I'll take notes of your feedback and try again.
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