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Hello!

The two main paragraphs just introduce the issues. You need more development, along with possible remedies/solutions.

Vocabulary and grammar are clearly limited in terms of range, but accuracy is reasonable.

Basically, just too short and simple.
David

Hello!

This is a good essay. Points are clear and there is good development, particularly in the second main paragraph. Vocabulary and grammar are good, both in terms of range and accuracy.

All the best,
David

Hello! Some strange vocabulary here - eyes-span, grasping power??? You claim that the criticisms of TV are baseless, yet totally fail to refute them. Your second paragraph seems to assume that everyone only watches TV for documentaries and educational programmes, which is demonstrably untrue. Vocabu...

Hello! Overall, quite a good essay. Ideas are clear and valid, but could be more developed. For example, you mention poor governance in some countries. If charities take over the responsibilities, does that mean the government can simply continue to be bad at its job? Same thing with unemployment - ...

Much better! (But good luck writing such a long essay in 40 minutes!)
D

Hello!

The basic ideas are good, but not expressed very well. There are many grammar mistakes which can make the essay hard to understand. This is often because the sentences are too long. There are also some errors with vocabulary, e.g. academia and modal schools.

All the best,
David

Hello! Introduction - Not exactly. Animals release CO2. The introduction is longer than the main paragraphs. First main paragraph - defaulters? Second main paragraph - The policy of planting 2 tress would increase forest areas, but reduce land use for other purposes. With a rising population, this i...

It won't help - T/F/NG is totally acceptable.
D

Hello! Paragraphing is unclear near the beginning. I'm not sure which Asian students you are referring to. Besides, most teachers would hardly regard "a certain accent" as the primary issue for most students. The conclusion needs to be rewritten (restricted ... just a basis?). However, ove...

Hello! The example of Egypt does not mean other countries use the same system. The example of Japan is unclear, particularly the use of 'depends on'. There are a lot of grammatical errors and this may sometimes contribute to a lack of clarity (see above). Some sentences are too long (second main par...

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Fiercely debated? Really?

Your points are good. There is only a limited range of grammar but accuracy is good. Vocabulary is also good, with some topic-specific items.

Overall, not bad at all!
David

Hello! The point in the first main paragraph is good, but the second main paragraph is simply untrue. India runs mainly on fossil fuels and alternative energy sources are not always cheaper. Grammatical range is limited and there are quite a lot of basic errors. Vocabulary is good with some topic-sp...

Hello! Overall, the main problem is one of over-generalisation. "almost all families are leading an isolated life" Rubbish! Work? Studies? The internet? The idea that all kids play computer games 24/7 and are totally addicted has been debunked. In fact, there is plenty of evidence to sugge...

Hello! This is a very good essay. Arguments are clear and well-developed. The range of grammar and vocabulary is very good. There are some high level vocab items, e.g. loyalty, stable working environment, acquire. There are some grammatical errors, but these do not affect meaning and are usually ass...

Hello! Overall, a good essay. Points are clear and developed. However, I think that you could have also looked at NGOs and international organisations (e.g. UN, Arab League). The range of grammar is good, with some nice use of modals. However, there are some mistakes, though these do not affect mean...

Hello! The introduction is longer than the second main paragraph. The second main paragraph totally contradicts the first! It's like two totally different people wrote them. This is the result of poor language (grammar and vocabulary). The conclusion is totally unclear. If it depends on wealth and p...

Hello! The introduction is much too long. You do not really write anything about the possible problems of relying too much on technology. The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including many basic ones, e.g. scientist have, scientist are. Vocabulary is not well used and there are many exam...

Hello! You have described the data, but the organisation is a bit of a mess. The summary only mentions the highest number of passengers, not the overall trend. The details are not described from left to right, in a logical order. Grammar and vocabulary are poor with numerous errors, including many b...

Hello! The first main paragraph simply goes in a circle without explaining why punishment works. The second main paragraph does not flow logically either. The conclusion introduces a new idea that should be developed in a main paragraph. Overall, this is weak essay. The points do not adequately resp...

Hello! No, the arguments have to be based on reality, otherwise you could just write ridiculous things like "I think that hosting a sports event is a good thing for a country because it helps the cats to ride on motorbikes whilst eating Russian food". You can easily find the public band de...

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Just take a walk around some hotels and restaurants in Vietnam. How many have robots?

David

Hello! The introduction and the second main paragraph are the same length. The points seem to be reasonable and there is some development of them. Vocabulary is good, with some specific topic-related items, e.g. cardiovascular, cognition, enhancing strength. Grammar is very good, both in terms of ra...

Hello! Great question! Indubitably? Are you going to the Victorian Empire English School?! Overall, not a bad answer, but you haven't really looked at the role of the father. The example in the second main paragraph is not clear. Simply reverse the positions and it doesn't prove that either men or w...

Hello! Overall, this is a very good essay. Points are clear and developed to some extent. Vocabulary and grammar are used well - excessive consumption, the more ... the higher, positively correlated, can result in, are linked with. I'd prefer a more personal conclusion, though this type of essay doe...

Hello! I think you need to explain the 'easy, flexible and fast' aspects of renting. You assume that there a lot of properties available at good prices, which is not always the case! Many owners prefer to rent for longer periods, so 'flexible' may not be true either. OK, so your points in the second...