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Hello! Mundane existence? So pessimistic! This is a good essay. There's a good range of vocabulary and grammar with relatively few errors. The points are good and clear, though they could be better developed (more detail/precision). Organisation is very clear with very good use of connectives. The c...

Hello! Fluency - Some pauses and speech is a little slow. Needs some work. Coherence - Very good range of connectives used correctly. Sentence order could be better in these long answers. Vocabulary - Good range with some nice details. This is your best area, in my opinion. Grammar - Good range of s...

Hello! Fluency - Some unnatural pauses. Speech is a little slow. Coherence - Good range of connectives used correctly. Vocabulary - Quite limited. Very general with few details and reasons. Grammar - Good grammar in terms of accuracy, but the range of complex structures is limited. Pronunciation - N...

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David

Hello! I don't understand the second sentence of the first main paragraph. The first sentence may be true but there is no evidence for this. The fourth sentence is a mess because of poor grammar. The points in the second main paragraph may be true, but, again, no evidence or support is provided. Ove...

Hello! Overall, a good essay. You make some very good points, but in the conclusion you fail to say why you favour one argument over the other. Grammatically, you use 'will' too often. However, in other parts of the essay, you do use modals very well. Vocabulary is very good in terms of both range a...

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Overall, a very good report. There are not many grammar mistakes and the range of vocabulary and grammar is acceptable. You have described the process well and there is a clear overview.

Well done!
David

Hello! Great question! In the first main paragraph, you fall victim to the classic problem of over-generalising - "The languages used on books are purely academic and poetry." WRONG!!! There are plenty of paperback thrillers and romances to refute this assertion completely! There's a lot o...

Hello! Overall, this is a very good report. The biggest mistake is that you have decided to compare AND THEN describe the two lines individually. You can do either or leave the comparison for the overview, but the method you have chosen may lead to some repetition. However, it's not too serious in t...

Hello! Your points are basically good, but some of the details are unclear or incorrect. I'm pretty sure ping-pong diplomacy started around 1972, not 1941. The example of Ai Fukuhara isn't clearly connected to WORLD peace. Regular readers of my posts will be amazed that I haven't mentioned the intro...

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This is a very good essay. Your points are clear and developed. There is a very good range of vocabulary with some high level items. The range of grammar is a little limited, but still good and accuracy is good too.

To get a very high score, you need to work on the grammar.

Well done!
David

Oh, I LOVE the island question! You should add a brief description of the island before development ('with hundreds of metres length' is insufficient). Your main description of the new developments is good, but I think that you could order the points better. I suggest starting with the pier because ...

Hello! Your points are good but not well-developed. (The point about a thousand hours is incorrect, but the basic idea of constant practice is true.) Try to explain them in more detail and give examples if possible. Vocabulary is reasonable - more detail would help you to get a higher score. There a...

Hello! This is a good essay. The first thing you need to do is explain why you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages (in the conclusion). The range and accuracy of vocabulary is good. However, you need to work on the grammatical range a little. Use modals and adverbs to make your statement...

Hello! There's no question! The conclusion is fine for those particular subjects, but what about others? With regard to meetings, what about online meetings? Overall, not a bad essay, but as mentioned above, some points need to be developed and clarified. Vocabulary is reasonable in terms of both ra...

Hello! This is a good essay. Your points are clear, though a little more development might be good, especially in the first main paragraph which is about the same length as the conclusion. You have used a good range of language - both in terms of grammar and vocabulary. There are some errors, but me...

Hello! This is a good essay and relatively easy to make into a very good one. First, make the first main paragraph much longer so that both main paragraphs are of a similar length. Second, make the conclusion more personal (it is to be hoped that - yuk!). Third, explain what you mean by social harmo...

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Overall, this is quite good. Vocabulary and grammar are both very good, with plenty of trend language and a very good range of structures used accurately. The overview should try to mention trends as well.

All the best,
David

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This is a good essay. There is one main problem (the second main paragraph is too short) and one small one ('complacency' is the wrong word). Aside from this, you've done really well!

David

Hello! persuaded? Do you mean 'pursued'? You tend to express the points in a simplistic, even 'extreme' way (poverty and dangerous diseases would be eradicated) but your basic points are good. The points are also developed, although a less personal example would be better. So, basically you need to ...

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You should discuss the three sports separately as they each have slightly different trends.

However, vocabulary and grammar are both good, so this is not a bad report overall. You could also expand the overview a little to include the other lines.

All the best,
David

Hello! Sorry, but I find the main paragraphs confusing. The first fails to explain why universities should ONLY offer those courses. The second seems to support the argument that university courses should lead to jobs (developing future leaders). This is mainly due to the language used. There are nu...

Hello! I'm not sure about these examples. There is often violence at India-Pakistan matches (you do claim it is a perfect example!) and recent events re North Korea do not seem to suggest any detente between the 2 countries. There are some very strange vocabulary choices - patriotic unity, imply, ob...

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Overall, this is a good letter. I think you could have mentioned some more about Judith, however. Grammar and vocabulary are both good. There are quite a lot of minor grammar errors, so that would be the thing to focus on. But, everything is clear, so this is good overall.

David

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This is a good report. I think that you spent too long on the introduction, but that's a minor point. You have covered all the data clearly and noted the key trends.

Grammar and vocabulary are both good and everything is clear, despite a few minor errors.

Well done!
David