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Hello, Harris! Introduction - Nowadays! Is it agreed? Not in China, India, Indonesia, Brazil, Nigeria, Pakistan, Saudi Arabia ... Need I continue?! First main paragraph - Whoops! I am a male and therefore am unable to give birth! The second sentence does not prove the third. The fourth sentence seem...

Hi Vishwa, This is reasonable, except that you haven't really explored alternatives very much, or really said why (or which type of) written tests work well. For example, when you talk about written tests, do you mean essays, multiple choice questions, short answer questions? Why do the combined wri...

Hello! Introduction - Good. First main paragraph - attributed to means caused by or created by. Otherwise good. Second main paragraph - Ah, now it's clear that you have missed the point! You've missed the words 'a lot' from the statement. Conclusion - Doesn't really answer the question. (See paragra...

Hello again, Owais! Introduction - Well, i'm going to be little 'picky' and say that few people spend MOST of their adult lives in the workplace, despite what many people claim. Similarly, here in East Asia, students constantly claim that they spend so much time studying, but actually they usually d...

Hello Owais! Introduction - Nice! Main paragraphs - Very good! I think a few specific examples would help. Conclusion - As with many (most?) T2 essays posted here recently, you fail to make the conclusion a personal one. Bear in mind that the question clearly asks you the extent to which YOU agree o...

Hello!
I generally do not recommend my students get an EOR, as it costs half the price of a test and is likely to return negative. No, they do not check if you are taking the test again in the future or if you have taken it any other time in the past.
All the best,
David

Hi Rahul, Well, there WILL be a time limit, but probably they will not be so strict if you exceed it a little. The main effects will be to allow you time to get more vocabulary and grammar into your answers. I would advise you to practice making points clearly, so that the influence of your stammer ...

Hello again! Introduction - I'm not sure that shopping has been a necessary evil and the people shopping might just be happy generally. First main paragraph - This is a little difficult to understand. I don't think we can really criticise people for concentrating on shopping when they are shopping. ...

Hello Wayfarer! Introduction - Long, but good. First main paragraph - Very general, but otherwise no major flaws. Second main paragraph - Quite good, with an interesting example, although the link between the fiction story and real life is not illustrated, i.e. the fact that the plot of the film was...

Hi Fasah, Generally, use referencing words such as he/she/it/they/these/those - or even 'we' - throughout the essay (T2), but remember that the conclusion should present a personal opinion, so use 'I' there. Try not to use the same referencing words all the time, but some repetition is inevitable. A...

Hi Doni, Introduction - Good, but the last sentence is not well-phrased. First main paragraph - Very good! Second main paragraph - Also good! Conclusion - Change 'nob' to 'job'! Personalise the conclusion a little. Overall - Good arguments and good use of vocabulary. Some grammatical errors, but gen...

Hello Sindu,
The use of abbreviations is not encouraged, but some are acceptable, e.g., etc., i.e.
David

Hi Vishwa, Basically, the organisation is clear. Be a little careful with some vocabulary and facts ... 1. business people do not have to travel by air 2. change 'attain' to 'gain' (re taxes) 3. you don't say why increasing tax will not work 4. I don't think that aviation fuel causes the ozone hole ...

Hello Fasah, You'll be pleased to hear that I think this is a very good essay! I think that you have picked up on the 2 main arguments and provided good examples. Vocabulary is both of a high standard and clear. You might want to check your essay for some basic mistakes and/or cut down the length of...

Hello! It would be useful to have the question, because there have been several on this topic, each slightly different. Anyway, let's go through each paragraph ... Introduction - Try to personalise the intro a little, i.e. modify "it is believed" and "this will be proven". First ...

Hi Vishwa, Introduction - "it is a deniable fact" - Then is it really a fact? "plays a vital ROLE". "may or may NOT be" First main paragraph - A few interesting ideas, but they could be more developed, or you could reduce the number of points and explain those in detail...

Hello!
If you don't think that your ideas were so good, I'd suggest re-taking the test rather than getting a re-mark.
David

Hello! Introduction - "I don't believe that people will not go ..." That double-negative is a little messy! Main paragraph - This needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs. 'Nevertheless' might make a good break. Conclusion - Short and sweet! Overall, I think that you make some good p...

Hello! Let's go through paragraph by paragraph. Introduction - Quite good. First main paragraph - I'm not sure about some of the phrasing, e.g. "very dangerous" and "they are not mature enough to learn good and bad of life". Are these really true? Second main paragraph - How is c...

Hi Vishwa, Introduction - Good. I like the mention of people below the poverty line. First main paragraph - At the 'gross' level? A few good examples - nice! Second main paragraph - There's that word 'moot' again, used incorrectly! :evil: The issue of corruption is true, but can be applied in any si...

Hi Rahul, I'm not sure what kind of documentation is required. The official IELTS website simply says that you must inform your test centre when you register for the test, so I would contact them asap. As examiners, we are not permitted to give candidates with undeclared medical/physical issues any ...

Nice! D

"an upward trend in people aged 60 or over whereas the population aged 14 or under in both countries ..."
Good stuff!
D

Hello again, To be honest, you can get a decent score quite easily with only the most basic ideas, but a well-developed T2 needs "a little extra"! Simple arguments tend to use simpler language (e.g. they lack good adverbs such as usually, generally) and simpler grammar (e.g. fewer conditio...

Hi Sandeep,
Yes, it can be a tough line to tread - ideas and coherence, vocab and grammar.
As long as you have a couple more months and time to write more essays, you should be heading for a good score!
David