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by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 10:03 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 1
Replies: 3
Views: 630

Re: please assess my ielts writing task 1

Hi Fasah, Good report! There are just a few mistakes that I'd like to point out. 1. The chart doesn't show the NUMBER of people with computers - it shows the percentage of people who have them. 2. The second piece of information - The second chart 3. with bachelors - with bachelors degrees 4. the co...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 9:51 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Evaluate My Letter for writing task 1
Replies: 1
Views: 408

Re: Please Evaluate My Letter for writing task 1

Hi Sanket, Good letter! You have answered all the key points and provided some development for each. Only a solution to the barking is not mentioned, but it is clearly suggested that the neighbor find one. Grammar and vocab are generally good and sometimes very good, e.g. Lack of sleep is hampering ...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 9:42 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Assess my essay for Writing Task 2
Replies: 1
Views: 457

Re: Please Assess my essay for Writing Task 2

Hi Sanket, The first thing I notice is that you have focused relatively little on reducing the problems. Also, you seem convinced that wearing glasses is purely a result of playing computer games, which is unlikely. Otherwise, the essay is quite good, with good vocabulary. Though grammar mistakes ar...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:43 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please assess my writing task 2
Replies: 1
Views: 863

Re: Please assess my writing task 2

Hi Asadurk! In the first paragraph, you have generalised quite a lot. You assume that children will do their homework before playing games, for instance. In the second paragraph, you mention lack of physical activity, which doesn't quite fit with your example of watching TV. However, overall, you ha...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:37 am
Forum: IELTS related discussion
Topic: Need IELTS to get in Uni
Replies: 1
Views: 1547

Re: Need IELTS to get in Uni

Spelling only covers a small part of the criteria and is very unlikely to prevent you from getting 6/6.5. Most candidates need to ... 1. answer the question, not the topic 2. use clear vocabulary rather than throwing in higher level vocab that is incorrectly used 3. use a variety of grammar structur...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:35 am
Forum: IELTS related discussion
Topic: Can we use idioms in our writing? Do they increase the score?
Replies: 3
Views: 2277

Re: Can we use idioms in our writing? Do they increase the score?

Yes, it's a good idea to use idioms IF you use them correctly and not too often. Idioms are often informal and not suitable for IELTS writing. Be VERY careful about using them just to try to get a higher score. This often backfires!
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by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:22 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 1
Replies: 3
Views: 630

Re: please assess my ielts writing task 1

Hi Fasah,
We need the diagram for this one.
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:21 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: ESSAY EVALUATION
Replies: 2
Views: 826

Re: ESSAY EVALUATION

Hi Vishwa!
I like this essay! Yes, it really does depend a LOT on where you live. Also, in Western countries, libraries have become social centres where people can organise group activities.
Well done!
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:18 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate this writing task 2.
Replies: 1
Views: 516

Re: Please evaluate this writing task 2.

Hello Asadurk! Introduction - demerits are deductions from a score for doing something wrong First main paragraph - So, the person who does the same job for 40 years, whilst others around him/her get promoted is loyal and a paragon? Really?! So, that's what you will be doing with your life? You're h...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:03 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting un
Replies: 2
Views: 964

Re: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and startin

Hi Medina, Introduction - perception is an idea or feeling, not an action First main paragraph - You mention independence and family life together. A little confusing. Also, you need to explain exactly how these things happen, perhaps using examples. Second main paragraph - Again, you make a lot of ...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:54 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Task 2
Replies: 1
Views: 405

Re: Task 2

Hi Wayfarer!
Good essay! I think that you could have mentioned the time factor more explicitly, e.g how much time might a child be able to work.
In the conclusion, you say 'combine both'. Not sure what you mean there.
All the best,
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:50 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Task 1 Line chart, share and need comments
Replies: 4
Views: 704

Re: Task 1 Line chart, share and need comments

Hi Scott!
Very good. You have covered all the main points and noted the main trends. Overall, good vocab and grammar too.
1. dramatic, not dramatical
2. more than tripled, not more than trippled increase
All the best,
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:45 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please assess my essay
Replies: 1
Views: 444

Re: Please assess my essay

Hi Doni, Generally, a good essay with very good grammar and good vocab. Well done! The only two points I would make are ... 1. Your arguments in the second main paragraph aren't proven. Examples might be better. And change the language so it is not so absolute. 2. In the introduction you say you wil...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:54 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Change
Replies: 2
Views: 625

Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Change

Hello!
I think that this is a good essay, but you could also mention the downsides of each viewpoint.
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:51 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Education
Replies: 3
Views: 3149

Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Education

VERY good!
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by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:50 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Media
Replies: 4
Views: 2414

Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Media

Hello! Generally, I want to like this essay, but it is even more one-sided than the essay I just marked about international aid. You clearly think that ALL media behaves in the same way. Is that really true? I agree that you have characterised most of the mainstream media correctly, but, for example...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:42 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Writing task 2 attempt
Replies: 1
Views: 1543

Re: Writing task 2 attempt

Hello! Overall, a good essay with nice grammar and vocabulary. To improve the essay, I would point out that it's not quite as clear as you suggest. For instance, countries that are relatively good on human rights still spend money on weapons. The USA spends more than any other country and Burma does...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:19 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Pls assess my essay task1
Replies: 6
Views: 1271

Re: Pls assess my essay task1

Hello!
Overall, not bad, but beware of some strange phrasing.
1. highest trend
2. came parallel to - returned to the same level
3. second highest calls - second highest call time
4. came to a standstill - leveled off?
5. gradually increased? - that's a massive increase in 4 years!
All the best,
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:14 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please kindly assess the essay
Replies: 1
Views: 472

Re: please kindly assess the essay

Hi Max, Sorry, but this assessment is not going to be good. I can barely understand the first main paragraph. I think that you have tried to use a lot of high level words without actually knowing what they mean. What is the connection between competitiveness and accountability? Actually, I would thi...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:04 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Kindly assess my written part.
Replies: 1
Views: 507

Re: Kindly assess my written part.

Hello again, Vishwa! The first main paragraph is good. An example would make it better. My personal favourite example is the Northern White Rhinoceros. It's strange and sad to know that I have actually seen all six of the last of these rhinos that existed in the world. The second paragraph starts we...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 8:52 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Could please anyone help me to review my essay.
Replies: 1
Views: 291

Re: Could please anyone help me to review my essay.

Hi Hani! Not bad for only a year of study! Cambridge University investments? Overall, the essay is not bad, but I think that you have failed to address the question of what a good member of society is and how schools/parents create them. A good way to do this is by giving examples. Grammar is actual...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sun Nov 29, 2015 8:48 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Teachers pls help me mark this writing
Replies: 4
Views: 685

Re: Teachers pls help me mark this writing

Hello! Sorry to keep you waiting. Let's have a look! Looking at the two main paragraphs, we see a common problem. In the essay, it is a good idea to present opposing points of view. However, here this has not clearly been done. For example, you say that crimes 'will never decrease' in the first para...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:31 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Kindly assess my writing task 1
Replies: 2
Views: 3207

Re: Kindly assess my writing task 1

Hello!
This is a very good report!
A few minor suggestions ...
1. I would have a paragraph for each line.
2. 'rate' means the speed of change. In the summary, change it to 'proportion'
3. THE private/public sector
Well done!
David
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:25 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: kindly check my writing task1
Replies: 2
Views: 622

Re: kindly check my writing task1

Hello!
This is a good report - well done!
I think that you could sometimes change gradual/gradually to steady and use forecast/predict instead of 'will'. I would also mention in the overview that Mandarin is predicted to grow the fastest.
All the best,
David