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- Mon Nov 30, 2015 10:03 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 1
- Replies: 3
- Views: 630
Re: please assess my ielts writing task 1
Hi Fasah, Good report! There are just a few mistakes that I'd like to point out. 1. The chart doesn't show the NUMBER of people with computers - it shows the percentage of people who have them. 2. The second piece of information - The second chart 3. with bachelors - with bachelors degrees 4. the co...
- Mon Nov 30, 2015 9:51 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please Evaluate My Letter for writing task 1
- Replies: 1
- Views: 408
Re: Please Evaluate My Letter for writing task 1
Hi Sanket, Good letter! You have answered all the key points and provided some development for each. Only a solution to the barking is not mentioned, but it is clearly suggested that the neighbor find one. Grammar and vocab are generally good and sometimes very good, e.g. Lack of sleep is hampering ...
- Mon Nov 30, 2015 9:42 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please Assess my essay for Writing Task 2
- Replies: 1
- Views: 457
Re: Please Assess my essay for Writing Task 2
Hi Sanket, The first thing I notice is that you have focused relatively little on reducing the problems. Also, you seem convinced that wearing glasses is purely a result of playing computer games, which is unlikely. Otherwise, the essay is quite good, with good vocabulary. Though grammar mistakes ar...
- Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:43 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please assess my writing task 2
- Replies: 1
- Views: 863
Re: Please assess my writing task 2
Hi Asadurk! In the first paragraph, you have generalised quite a lot. You assume that children will do their homework before playing games, for instance. In the second paragraph, you mention lack of physical activity, which doesn't quite fit with your example of watching TV. However, overall, you ha...
- Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:37 am
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Need IELTS to get in Uni
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1547
Re: Need IELTS to get in Uni
Spelling only covers a small part of the criteria and is very unlikely to prevent you from getting 6/6.5. Most candidates need to ... 1. answer the question, not the topic 2. use clear vocabulary rather than throwing in higher level vocab that is incorrectly used 3. use a variety of grammar structur...
- Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:35 am
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Can we use idioms in our writing? Do they increase the score?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2277
Re: Can we use idioms in our writing? Do they increase the score?
Yes, it's a good idea to use idioms IF you use them correctly and not too often. Idioms are often informal and not suitable for IELTS writing. Be VERY careful about using them just to try to get a higher score. This often backfires!
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- Mon Nov 30, 2015 2:33 am
- Forum: IELTS related discussion
- Topic: Does anybody know what speaking examinator write on a paper during the speaking part?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1701
Re: Does anybody know what speaking examinator write on a paper during the speaking part?
Not quite sure what you mean.
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:22 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: please assess my ielts writing task 1
- Replies: 3
- Views: 630
Re: please assess my ielts writing task 1
Hi Fasah,
We need the diagram for this one.
David
We need the diagram for this one.
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:21 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: ESSAY EVALUATION
- Replies: 2
- Views: 826
Re: ESSAY EVALUATION
Hi Vishwa!
I like this essay! Yes, it really does depend a LOT on where you live. Also, in Western countries, libraries have become social centres where people can organise group activities.
Well done!
David
I like this essay! Yes, it really does depend a LOT on where you live. Also, in Western countries, libraries have become social centres where people can organise group activities.
Well done!
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:18 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please evaluate this writing task 2.
- Replies: 1
- Views: 516
Re: Please evaluate this writing task 2.
Hello Asadurk! Introduction - demerits are deductions from a score for doing something wrong First main paragraph - So, the person who does the same job for 40 years, whilst others around him/her get promoted is loyal and a paragon? Really?! So, that's what you will be doing with your life? You're h...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 11:03 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting un
- Replies: 2
- Views: 964
Re: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and startin
Hi Medina, Introduction - perception is an idea or feeling, not an action First main paragraph - You mention independence and family life together. A little confusing. Also, you need to explain exactly how these things happen, perhaps using examples. Second main paragraph - Again, you make a lot of ...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:54 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Task 2
- Replies: 1
- Views: 405
Re: Task 2
Hi Wayfarer!
Good essay! I think that you could have mentioned the time factor more explicitly, e.g how much time might a child be able to work.
In the conclusion, you say 'combine both'. Not sure what you mean there.
All the best,
David
Good essay! I think that you could have mentioned the time factor more explicitly, e.g how much time might a child be able to work.
In the conclusion, you say 'combine both'. Not sure what you mean there.
All the best,
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:50 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Task 1 Line chart, share and need comments
- Replies: 4
- Views: 704
Re: Task 1 Line chart, share and need comments
Hi Scott!
Very good. You have covered all the main points and noted the main trends. Overall, good vocab and grammar too.
1. dramatic, not dramatical
2. more than tripled, not more than trippled increase
All the best,
David
Very good. You have covered all the main points and noted the main trends. Overall, good vocab and grammar too.
1. dramatic, not dramatical
2. more than tripled, not more than trippled increase
All the best,
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 10:45 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Please assess my essay
- Replies: 1
- Views: 444
Re: Please assess my essay
Hi Doni, Generally, a good essay with very good grammar and good vocab. Well done! The only two points I would make are ... 1. Your arguments in the second main paragraph aren't proven. Examples might be better. And change the language so it is not so absolute. 2. In the introduction you say you wil...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:54 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Change
- Replies: 2
- Views: 625
Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Change
Hello!
I think that this is a good essay, but you could also mention the downsides of each viewpoint.
David
I think that this is a good essay, but you could also mention the downsides of each viewpoint.
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:51 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Education
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3149
Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Education
VERY good!
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- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:50 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Writing task 2: Topic - Media
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2414
Re: Writing task 2: Topic - Media
Hello! Generally, I want to like this essay, but it is even more one-sided than the essay I just marked about international aid. You clearly think that ALL media behaves in the same way. Is that really true? I agree that you have characterised most of the mainstream media correctly, but, for example...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:42 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Writing task 2 attempt
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1543
Re: Writing task 2 attempt
Hello! Overall, a good essay with nice grammar and vocabulary. To improve the essay, I would point out that it's not quite as clear as you suggest. For instance, countries that are relatively good on human rights still spend money on weapons. The USA spends more than any other country and Burma does...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:19 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Pls assess my essay task1
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1271
Re: Pls assess my essay task1
Hello!
Overall, not bad, but beware of some strange phrasing.
1. highest trend
2. came parallel to - returned to the same level
3. second highest calls - second highest call time
4. came to a standstill - leveled off?
5. gradually increased? - that's a massive increase in 4 years!
All the best,
David
Overall, not bad, but beware of some strange phrasing.
1. highest trend
2. came parallel to - returned to the same level
3. second highest calls - second highest call time
4. came to a standstill - leveled off?
5. gradually increased? - that's a massive increase in 4 years!
All the best,
David
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:14 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: please kindly assess the essay
- Replies: 1
- Views: 472
Re: please kindly assess the essay
Hi Max, Sorry, but this assessment is not going to be good. I can barely understand the first main paragraph. I think that you have tried to use a lot of high level words without actually knowing what they mean. What is the connection between competitiveness and accountability? Actually, I would thi...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 9:04 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Kindly assess my written part.
- Replies: 1
- Views: 507
Re: Kindly assess my written part.
Hello again, Vishwa! The first main paragraph is good. An example would make it better. My personal favourite example is the Northern White Rhinoceros. It's strange and sad to know that I have actually seen all six of the last of these rhinos that existed in the world. The second paragraph starts we...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 8:52 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Could please anyone help me to review my essay.
- Replies: 1
- Views: 291
Re: Could please anyone help me to review my essay.
Hi Hani! Not bad for only a year of study! Cambridge University investments? Overall, the essay is not bad, but I think that you have failed to address the question of what a good member of society is and how schools/parents create them. A good way to do this is by giving examples. Grammar is actual...
- Sun Nov 29, 2015 8:48 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Teachers pls help me mark this writing
- Replies: 4
- Views: 685
Re: Teachers pls help me mark this writing
Hello! Sorry to keep you waiting. Let's have a look! Looking at the two main paragraphs, we see a common problem. In the essay, it is a good idea to present opposing points of view. However, here this has not clearly been done. For example, you say that crimes 'will never decrease' in the first para...
- Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:31 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: Kindly assess my writing task 1
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3207
Re: Kindly assess my writing task 1
Hello!
This is a very good report!
A few minor suggestions ...
1. I would have a paragraph for each line.
2. 'rate' means the speed of change. In the summary, change it to 'proportion'
3. THE private/public sector
Well done!
David
This is a very good report!
A few minor suggestions ...
1. I would have a paragraph for each line.
2. 'rate' means the speed of change. In the summary, change it to 'proportion'
3. THE private/public sector
Well done!
David
- Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:25 am
- Forum: Post your writing
- Topic: kindly check my writing task1
- Replies: 2
- Views: 622
Re: kindly check my writing task1
Hello!
This is a good report - well done!
I think that you could sometimes change gradual/gradually to steady and use forecast/predict instead of 'will'. I would also mention in the overview that Mandarin is predicted to grow the fastest.
All the best,
David
This is a good report - well done!
I think that you could sometimes change gradual/gradually to steady and use forecast/predict instead of 'will'. I would also mention in the overview that Mandarin is predicted to grow the fastest.
All the best,
David