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by ielts_barry
Sun Mar 15, 2015 2:43 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Introduction Paragraph of Task 2 Essay
Replies: 5
Views: 1441

Re: Introduction Paragraph of Task 2 Essay

You could use an intro like this one that i just made. People have different views about whether or not children should idolize sports celebrities. While some individuals argue that it is absurd for young people to follow in their idols' footsteps, I believe that these sports icons can be great insp...
by ielts_barry
Sun Mar 15, 2015 2:29 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Introduction Paragraph of Task 2 Essay
Replies: 5
Views: 1441

Re: Introduction Paragraph of Task 2 Essay

1.try to make your introduction simpler and concise. 2. Apprently, linking words were overused. 3. According to public band descriptors, your opinion should be clear throughout the essay. Therefore, you must at least mention your stand. 4. Try to increase not only your general lexis but also your to...
by ielts_barry
Fri Feb 27, 2015 9:04 pm
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Can this essay score an 8?
Replies: 2
Views: 1395

Re: Task 2. Comments will be greatly appreciated. :)

Hi danyocean. I will look into that. Thanks. :)
by ielts_barry
Fri Feb 27, 2015 11:50 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Can this essay score an 8?
Replies: 2
Views: 1395

Can this essay score an 8?

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered? Child obesity is one alarming issue that every country is facing these days. Clearly, th...
by ielts_barry
Fri Feb 27, 2015 11:46 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Attention first time posters!
Replies: 70
Views: 166870

Re: Enrich the writing forum by contributing to it

Please critic my ielts task 2 essay. Thanks Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered? Child obesity is one alarming issue that eve...