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by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 11:09 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Rewrite free healthcare task 2 please evaluate
Replies: 1
Views: 39

Re: Rewrite free healthcare task 2 please evaluate

Hello! The first main paragraph is good, but the second contains a few key problems. The point about contributing to the system is unclear. As you mention, 'free' health care is paid from taxes, so most people do actually contribute. If they DON'T pay the extra cost, they DON'T feel the burden??? Th...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 10:58 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Repost - Pls give me your comments
Replies: 2
Views: 680

Re: Repost - Pls give me your comments

Hello! The range and accuracy of grammar is reasonable to some extent. However, a greater variety, particularly conditionals, would make your arguments clearer (more later). The range of vocabulary appears reasonable, but I don't think that you have really used it to create a convincing argument. Qu...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 10:46 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Discuss both side and give your opinion essay
Replies: 1
Views: 51

Re: Discuss both side and give your opinion essay

Hello! Basically, quite a good essay. Your point about jobs is often cited with regard to this topic, but it actually doesn't stand up in reality. According to your argument, Japan should have massive unemployment and crime. It doesn't. With regard to grammar, you tend to use 'will' rather than more...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 10:25 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please assess my writing task 2
Replies: 1
Views: 36

Re: Please assess my writing task 2

Hello! This is a very good essay! Your points are very clear and well-developed. Organisation is very clear with very good use of connectives. The range and accuracy of the grammatical structures is very good. There are some very complex structures using modals that are produced perfectly. The range...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 10:22 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate my essay
Replies: 1
Views: 39

Re: Please evaluate my essay

Hello! This is a good essay. Your points are good and developed. I appreciate that, in the first main paragraph, you specify IT companies in India. The range and accuracy of the grammar is good. Mistakes do not change meaning or interfere with comprehension. The range of vocabulary is very good, wit...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Mon Jun 26, 2017 10:17 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate my essay Thanks :)
Replies: 1
Views: 47

Re: Please evaluate my essay Thanks :)

Hello! Your points are good, but I'm afraid that the excessive number of grammatical errors can interfere with meaning. You do develop the points and vocabulary is used quite well. Try not to have one main paragraph twice as long as the other. Basically, time to get out the grammar books. I also sug...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Jun 24, 2017 11:47 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please evaluate my essay !!
Replies: 1
Views: 84

Re: Please evaluate my essay !!

Hello! This is a BRILLIANT question!!! This phrase is SO BADLY used by many IELTS candidates! Let's see how you do ... The introduction is a little long (compared with the main paragraphs). Overall, your points are reasonable, but I think that you need to be a little more specific. The second main p...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Jun 24, 2017 11:41 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Please Kindly assess my writing task 2, thanks!
Replies: 1
Views: 61

Re: Please Kindly assess my writing task 2, thanks!

Hello! This is a very good essay. Your points are clear with some good development. Organisation is clear, with very good use of connectives. The range and accuracy of grammatical structures is impressive. You have used a nice variety of vocabulary, including some high-level, topic-specific items (i...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Jun 24, 2017 11:36 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: Writing Task 2 - Improving public health by increasing sports facilities
Replies: 2
Views: 59

Re: Writing Task 2 - Improving public health by increasing sports facilities

Hello! Overall, a good essay. I think that the crime aspect is a little weak, and you do seem to focus on basketball, but your other points/examples are good and you do add some development. Organisation is clear with good use of connectives. Vocabulary and grammar are good. Be a bit careful with mo...
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Sat Jun 24, 2017 11:31 am
Forum: Post your writing
Topic: please evaluate my essay
Replies: 1
Views: 44

Re: please evaluate my essay

Hello! This is a very good essay. The variety of grammatical structures and precise use of vocabulary is quite impressive. There are mistakes, but relatively few and they do not really interfere with meaning. Your points are clear, valid, and well-developed. Organisation is good, but I think that yo...